My Squeeze Page: Please Critique!

the design is great, I like it However you should focus a little bit on the copywriting. You should try to speak more with the possible leads, not trying to show them something and assuming they know what you are giving to them, I mean, like explaining more what they can do with the niches and how to take advantage with it.
Let's say:

What if I tell you that you can make money amazing and yet unknown niches?

And then you answer the question


Remember there will always be a problem that you need to solve

Wish you success

Sam

Hey Willisk. Just check out your squeeze page. Ok, here is my take. It's obvious that your are targeting the "make money online" market. To me, this squeeze page implies that the visitor already knows what a niche is.

I think that you may have skipped a step. How about starting off with the basics of making money online before trying to send them a list of possible niches.

For ex: As a headline, start off with something like this "Discover How Broke College Student Manage to Make $400 a Day Online". Send them a free report possibly Plr that you have modified about internet marketing.

THEN, the next email you may want to follow up about niche ideas because now thanks to the introduction, they are now familiar about what a niche is.

Also, your copy needs some work. The bullet points should list benefits of what you are sending. (free report/ebook) and not the "we hate spam too" sentence.

Hey Willisk,

thanks for the share. Firstly congrats on being bold and putting yourself out there to be helped, it's courageous but also smart.

Alright, just taking a quick look now, without covering anything that has been mentioned above I felt that the Twitter "Pass This On!" is cluttering your page and distracting from your message and the targeted action.

I'm guessing the main action you want is for sign-ups and list-building, so I would limit the distractions and options. Currently they can sign-up or share on Twitter.

Perhaps you could remove the twitter "pass this on"from your opt-in page, and just leave the sign-up.

BUT - it's a great idea so in the e-mail autoresponder series offer them an incentive to share it and "pass it on", eg. an extra resource, some personal attention, e-book/whatever

I think it's a great idea mate, my personal view is that it could be placed in a more effective place that won't distract from the main action - signing-up.

Other warriors may disagree, but that's my 2cents!

Wishing you the best of success Willisk,
D

You caught me in a good mood man.

I'll give you my view from the 15 seconds I looked at it. because that's more than I would have spent before hitting the back button.




It looks like a boilerplate optimize press setup.

Why do you mention As a bullet point? It already says something similar right under your opt-in submit button.

You need to make that area hit unique selling points or benefits.

Big deal if your safe with my email, I have no reason to even opt-in.
I don't know what I'm opting in for.

I don't care about you
I don't care about what your company name is

yet much of this kind of info takes up valuable space in your squeeze page, you can explain all that shit to me later after I opt in for whatever it is I came here for.:confused:

I obviously got to this website because I clicked on a paid link. What was I searching for at that time?

you need to provide a perceived value for that email address. I just don't see any with the wording there.

At least your taking action, that's what matters. From here on out its all testings and analytics.


goodluck

standard optimizepress page with no personal branding and some generic claims about making money online.

Try using the video squeezepage template to get some personal branding and get a headline that grabs me in and tells me immediately why you're different to every other marketer trying to get my details.

Hello there!
The over-all design is great! But I noticed that the "pass it on" and twitter button have different shade of white. I do not know if that is done on purpose. And maybe you can use some graphics? It will make your website look livelier if you will add one or two.
Regards

Thanks for all of the recommendations!

I will take them all into consideration and apply them to my squeeze page.

Thanks!

why dont you add another share button beside the twitter icon?
how about facebook & pinterest share button?
because that 2 rising like crazy these days.. :-)

Great sqeeze page in my opinion ,but if I were you I might add a few things here a video of urself telling about the service , a few images of happy people..small ones..and maybe a few facts with calculations about a good keyword and what difference it can make in a campaign ..otherwise Ill like to know how you designed this page ...its good

Hey Willisk,

I agree with what others have said but here is my take:

1. The "Pass this on" has the most weight. It overpowers your headline. If all you want people to do is pass it on via Twitter, then it works. I imagine you would prefer people sign up .

2. Your pass it on graphic is broken. The gradient stops between the words and the Twitter icon.

3. Your secondary headline actually has more interesting verbiage than your main headline. Read this "There are people making millions of dollars online everyday". That's more intriguing than getting anything emailed to me. Also, what is unique about your offer?

4. Do you really need the name field in the form? I know that personalization is nice but any barrier to conversion should be removed. If all you really need is their email to contact them, ask for just that. I don't like giving my name because I know that the business really doesn't care what my name is.

5. How do I benefit from your features? Instead of telling me the feature list, tell me how they reduce a pain point for me. Tell me how much time I can save because you've researched the niches for me.

6. As others have said, it is a standard OptimizePress design. It looks ordinary. Add some style to it.

7. There is nothing to really remember your page by. No branding until you get to the footer, which is very obtrusive. You have a plain white page and then a huge blue footer that doesn't fit in.

8. When you ask somebody to sign up, you should be clear about what they are signing up for and what happens next. Add an explanation telling them they are signing up for your newsletter and will receive an email with further instructions or their download or whatever happens next. "Instant access" doesn't tell me what's coming. Do I have to log in to something? Do I get emailed? Do I go to a download page?

9. This line is a little off-putting "I find more profitable niches than I have time to build websites for". I know where you're going with this but it sounds arrogant.

As others have suggested, video could help you pack in more information with less space.

Here are some free templates that I put together that you can use to tweak and make your own.

4 Free video landing page templates | Socialeers

Hope that helps.