Poll: Critique These Lame Taglines

by tomcam
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I sell a course that, I modestly believe, the best of its for beginners. (Reason: It covers every single step in both printed and video form, leaving nothing out, yet it also has good overview material.) When people get it, they love it (no returns), but I think it has the wrong name.

I'd like to give it a tagline that gets across the idea that it is comprehensive, leaves nothing to chance, and is easy to follow. Can you tell me which of these you hate least?

Needless to say if you have a better suggestion than these I'd be thrilled to use it.
#critique #lame #poll #taglines
  • Profile picture of the author RogueOne
    They all suck pretty bad, no doubt.
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    • Profile picture of the author tomcam
      Thanks, RogueOne. I agree. Now I'm throwing you out of my will.
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      • Profile picture of the author RogueOne
        Originally Posted by tomcam View Post

        Now I'm throwing you out of my will.
        Ain't that always the way.
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    • Profile picture of the author philrich21
      Originally Posted by RogueOne View Post

      They all suck pretty bad, no doubt.
      They do all suck are you seriously considering using the one that sucks least ??
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  • I feel so empty after reading these. They must have all sucked really hard.
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  • Profile picture of the author lanew
    I couldn't possible offer you a tag line unless I knew more about the product. Send me a link via PM to your sales page, or at least something that tells me everything about the course, and I'll give you a tag-line for free. I was broadcast copy writer for 20 years.

    Be well,

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  • Profile picture of the author FitMarketer
    They all suck if you ask me but if I had to pick one it would be the Brain Injection one

    Thats really lame
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  • Profile picture of the author newbim
    What service / product are you selling? If its Brain Injections, then I guess #2, but you'd need to give a little more info. .

    Put a little info on and I'll have a think, the rest of us could too. .
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    • Profile picture of the author tomcam
      Thanks all for responding. Several people asked what the product is--it's a WordPress course for beginners. Was careful not to seem self-promoting on it, hence the vagueness. I prefer to fail quickly so the plan was to just go with one of these. However response is so negative I may need to rethink :-O

      Very grateful for everyone's help and frankness.
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  • Profile picture of the author Carolynn
    The No Fail Method is actually genius, if it's true. Since you have no returns. You can change the concept or approach to, Never Fail.
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  • Profile picture of the author tomcam
    Carolynn, thanks! My goal in the course was to make it so literally every step is illustrated, described, and put into context. I have never seen anyone follow the instructions and not end up with a good site. Except my daughter, but she didn't follow the instructions and apparently exists only to humiliate me.
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    • Profile picture of the author Carolynn
      Originally Posted by tomcam View Post

      Carolynn, thanks! My goal in the course was to make it so literally every step is illustrated, described, and put into context.
      Genius.

      Originally Posted by tomcam View Post

      I have never seen anyone follow the instructions and not end up with a good site.
      Genius. Old school "find need and fill it", nice.

      The genius is in the simplicity my friend. I've been doing wordpress "both" for 2 years now every single video has been from a different youtube user.
      I've even bought a WSO here and got stuck.

      Don't listen to the so-called frank people, there is a serious need for a real step by step video I mean what are they hiding, are they press for time or something? Why can't people just make a step by step tut, outside of the reasonable wp updates, just make real tut!
      I'm giving real world real newbie time market research, because this concept will help people like me who initially got on here with wordpress clients ready to go. #newbie!

      Any way i tend to be long winded.

      I said all that, because you asked about a tagline, you won't need one if you change the concept to something a little more literal like literalize your pitch/sales angle. And Brand and brand and brand

      Could someone help me out here?

      Make your tagline be your sales angle and user experiences, and brand with logos etc. Can i see the site?

      But, then again I don't have all the details so major disclaimer
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  • Profile picture of the author newbim
    Sent a PM. If it s for theme creation, I'd be interested in taking a look at it myself. .
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  • Profile picture of the author Tim3
    A better question would have been "Which of these tag lines sucks the most?"
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  • Profile picture of the author tomcam
    Tim3, I'm not disagreeing :-O

    However, I'd rather go with something bad than agonize over it and not take action.
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    • Profile picture of the author RogueOne
      Originally Posted by tomcam View Post

      However, I'd rather go with something bad than agonize over it and not take action.
      You have to start testing somewhere.
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    • Profile picture of the author Tim3
      That's a commendable attitude Tom, you'll go far, have look through the copywriting section forum you might get some good ideas in there
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  • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
    Another thread where you need to be telepathic I guess.
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  • Profile picture of the author tomcam
    travlinguy-sorry, I don't understand?
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    • Profile picture of the author travlinguy
      Originally Posted by tomcam View Post

      travlinguy-sorry, I don't understand?
      You don't give enough info for intelligent comments. Taken out of context they all look weird. It would be easier to help if we knew what the product was or at least the main title.
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  • Profile picture of the author Tsnyder
    What's the name of the course... the tag line should relate to the name.
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  • Profile picture of the author LuckyIMer
    It was very hard to chose from them.. really retarded, if you ask me..
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