Poll: Critique These Lame Taglines

by tomcam

Posted: 11 years ago 25 replies

INTERNET MARKETING

I sell a course that, I modestly believe, the best of its for beginners. (Reason: It covers every single step in both printed and video form, leaving nothing out, yet it also has good overview material.) When people get it, they love it (no returns), but I think it has the wrong name.

I'd like to give it a tagline that gets across the idea that it is comprehensive, leaves nothing to chance, and is easy to follow. Can you tell me which of these you hate least?

Needless to say if you have a better suggestion than these I'd be thrilled to use it.

#critique #lame #poll #taglines

RogueOne 11 years ago

They all suck pretty bad, no doubt.
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- tomcam 11 years ago
  
  Thanks, RogueOne. I agree. Now I'm throwing you out of my will.
  
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  RogueOne 11 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by tomcam
  
  Now I'm throwing you out of my will.
  
  Ain't that always the way.
  
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- philrich21 11 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by RogueOne
  
  They all suck pretty bad, no doubt.
  
  They do all suck are you seriously considering using the one that sucks least ??
  
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stoltingmediagroup 11 years ago

I feel so empty after reading these. They must have all sucked really hard.
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lanew 11 years ago

I couldn't possible offer you a tag line unless I knew more about the product. Send me a link via PM to your sales page, or at least something that tells me everything about the course, and I'll give you a tag-line for free. I was broadcast copy writer for 20 years.

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FitMarketer 11 years ago

They all suck if you ask me but if I had to pick one it would be the Brain Injection one

Thats really lame
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newbim 11 years ago

What service / product are you selling? If its Brain Injections, then I guess #2, but you'd need to give a little more info. .

Put a little info on and I'll have a think, the rest of us could too. .
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- tomcam 11 years ago
  
  Thanks all for responding. Several people asked what the product is--it's a WordPress course for beginners. Was careful not to seem self-promoting on it, hence the vagueness. I prefer to fail quickly so the plan was to just go with one of these. However response is so negative I may need to rethink :-O
  
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Carolynn 11 years ago

The No Fail Method is actually genius, if it's true. Since you have no returns. You can change the concept or approach to, Never Fail.
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tomcam 11 years ago

Carolynn, thanks! My goal in the course was to make it so literally every step is illustrated, described, and put into context. I have never seen anyone follow the instructions and not end up with a good site. Except my daughter, but she didn't follow the instructions and apparently exists only to humiliate me.
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- Carolynn 11 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by tomcam
  
  Carolynn, thanks! My goal in the course was to make it so literally every step is illustrated, described, and put into context.
  
  Genius.
  
  Originally Posted by tomcam
  
  I have never seen anyone follow the instructions and not end up with a good site.
  
  Genius. Old school "find need and fill it", nice.
  
  The genius is in the simplicity my friend. I've been doing wordpress "both" for 2 years now every single video has been from a different youtube user.
  I've even bought a WSO here and got stuck.
  
  Don't listen to the so-called frank people, there is a serious need for a real step by step video I mean what are they hiding, are they press for time or something? Why can't people just make a step by step tut, outside of the reasonable wp updates, just make real tut!
  I'm giving real world real newbie time market research, because this concept will help people like me who initially got on here with wordpress clients ready to go. #newbie!
  
  Any way i tend to be long winded.
  
  I said all that, because you asked about a tagline, you won't need one if you change the concept to something a little more literal like literalize your pitch/sales angle. And Brand and brand and brand
  
  Could someone help me out here?
  
  Make your tagline be your sales angle and user experiences, and brand with logos etc. Can i see the site?
  
  But, then again I don't have all the details so major disclaimer
  
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newbim 11 years ago

Sent a PM. If it s for theme creation, I'd be interested in taking a look at it myself. .
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Tim3 11 years ago

A better question would have been "Which of these tag lines sucks the most?"
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tomcam 11 years ago

Tim3, I'm not disagreeing :-O

However, I'd rather go with something bad than agonize over it and not take action.
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- RogueOne 11 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by tomcam
  
  However, I'd rather go with something bad than agonize over it and not take action.
  
  You have to start testing somewhere.
  
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- Tim3 11 years ago
  
  That's a commendable attitude Tom, you'll go far, have look through the copywriting section forum you might get some good ideas in there
  
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travlinguy 11 years ago

Another thread where you need to be telepathic I guess.
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tomcam 11 years ago

travlinguy-sorry, I don't understand?
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- travlinguy 11 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by tomcam
  
  travlinguy-sorry, I don't understand?
  
  You don't give enough info for intelligent comments. Taken out of context they all look weird. It would be easier to help if we knew what the product was or at least the main title.
  
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  Ricky Allen 11 years ago
  
  Without really knowing enough about the product of course.
  
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  Ricky Allen 11 years ago
  
  And of course
  
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Tsnyder 11 years ago

What's the name of the course... the tag line should relate to the name.
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LuckyIMer 11 years ago

It was very hard to chose from them.. really retarded, if you ask me..
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