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First Capture Page...Can you let me know what you think please?

by Paycheck Rebel
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Hi all, this is my first capture page that I will be using for a solo ad (once entering your email, it takes you direct to the offer).

I would really appreciate any critique/criticism you can give me. It will only help me out and hopefully I can repay the favor someday.

Here is the page
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  • Profile picture of the author gromine
    I like the capture page. Tell me, did you use some kind of geo targeting to make the page understand where I was located? If that is the case then that is a great way to improve your click thru rate.
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  • Profile picture of the author James Foster
    1) Your headline is cut off at the top of the page

    2) Your income claim is too large for most people to believe

    3) No one will believe your offer is going away in 24 hours (even with the geo targeting script).

    You might be able to use a lot of those elements outside the IM space, but they've been seen way to many times by any list swapper you're going to buy solos from.

    And you'd be much better off using a different stream of traffic, but that's another conversation entirely.
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  • Profile picture of the author HzCy
    Pretty nice, I like it very much. Built it with bootstrap?

    The only thing I think you could do better is make it more clear whats it about.
    The big money looks like a little scam for me ...
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  • Profile picture of the author espresso
    Your targeting script in my case is off by about 20KM
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  • Profile picture of the author butterballs8
    $300,000 per month sounds a bit far fetched to me.... If such was the case, the page should be more dynamic with high quality graphics, text and perhaps a video.
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    • Profile picture of the author Paycheck Rebel
      Thank you everyone....it is actually a plug in you can buy from another member on the WF. Look up Emilis Strimaitis For only 7 bucks I coudln't really complain.
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      • Profile picture of the author agmccall
        Your geo targeting was about 30 miles off from where I am

        No one will believe that it is a "Limited Time Offer" (just my opinion)

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  • Profile picture of the author Stuart Walker
    On my screen your headline is cut off the page. I can't see most of it.
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  • Profile picture of the author Randall Magwood
    Are you making $10,000 a month? My senses tell me "no" since you have to ask us whether or not you have a good squeeze page. A person who is making $10,000 would know what works, how to test, and how to change things on the fly if it isn't producing. You should change your headline, and change the setup of your page altogether.
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  • Profile picture of the author drewfioravanti
    I think you need to set up 3 squeeze pages and test to see which one performs best instead of asking opions.
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  • Profile picture of the author AsknWhy
    Hey,

    Nice job on the background! Very interesting use of using Google Maps as well as a Geotarget Look Up.

    A couple ideas.

    1) I agree with many others, your claim is too large. Your website has no credibility at the moment, and or any credible claims that support that income claim. It'll deter others.

    2) Change the subheadline into something else. It's too generic and seems rather fake.

    3) Design: Change the font.

    4) WIIFM - What's In It For Me - Sign up for.. a revolutionary thing that doesn't seem credible. Change your CTA.

    Hope this helps!

    Originally Posted by Mlbinov8 View Post

    Hi all, this is my first capture page that I will be using for a solo ad (once entering your email, it takes you direct to the offer).

    I would really appreciate any critique/criticism you can give me. It will only help me out and hopefully I can repay the favor someday.

    Here is the page
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  • Profile picture of the author Jenna619
    It is OK, the land background should be money or a pile of money...I would like to see that.
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    • Profile picture of the author maxpow
      Besides the income being unbelievable-which isn't the worst I have seen-being most programs pitch some unbelievable income in a short span of time; the page is dull, no graphics and nothing eye capturing.

      Try looking at highly converting sales/capture pages and you will understand what actually gets people going. Yes, changing the income wouldn't hurt , but that is the least of the problem, as everyone is stating it is not visually captivating.
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  • Profile picture of the author Rmoney1990
    I like the Geo targeting, but does not really sound believable. I just seems to much for a capture page. I would go into a little bit more detail and about the product so people know who and what they are signing up for. Plus I would lower the monthly income, becuase people will think its "too good to be true" type mentality because they do not have the focus or confidence in what you are selling.
    Good luck, man
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