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My first video for a squeeze page

by peter800
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hello guys I am just finally starting to get into list building. I want my list to know that I care what they think and im not just trying to sell sell sell to them but really help them grow their business to a whole new level.

That being said this is my first time to make a video for a squeeze page. Please let me know what you think and if theres anything i can do to improve the video please let me know.

video 1

video 2

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thanks for your insight guys and gals I was about to give up yesterday but I am not going to give up like I have in the past.

let me know what you think of this its just on a demo site that I had, and I need to get awebber, and fix up the video like you guys suggested. Other than that what do you guys think?




http://click-to-give.org/?page_id=2

Thanks!


Peter
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  • Profile picture of the author Daus
    Nice video. But there're few things that I think you should fix

    1. The video is quite dark. Try to make the environment brighter.
    2. I think it would be much more better if you face towards the camera instead of like in the video. It seems a little awkward.
    3. There are almost no hand gestures in the video. Try to move them more.
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  • Profile picture of the author mattjay
    Try to make your video as professional as possible as noted above. the more people are impressed with your video the more they will likely be impressed with your free product.
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  • Profile picture of the author gcbmark20
    Hi Peter,

    You have made the most important step & that is to take action!

    Show me someone who gets it right the first time anyway.

    Yeah you could be more passionate with your message but
    as long as you try to be yourself & get your message across
    you can only get better.

    Look around to see how other successful marketers are getting
    their messages across & use that as a base to get your message
    across to your market.

    You took action & I congratulate you for that!

    Well done & all the best for the future.

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    • Profile picture of the author peter800
      Originally Posted by Daus View Post

      Nice video. But there're few things that I think you should fix

      1. The video is quite dark. Try to make the environment brighter.
      2. I think it would be much more better if you face towards the camera instead of like in the video. It seems a little awkward.
      3. There are almost no hand gestures in the video. Try to move them more.
      thank you for your tips, I was trying to take the video in my office to make it look more professional but it gets almost no natural light that was with my lights on. Also I am on my Imac and every angle I looked it seemed to show up the same I thought it was strange I think ill try videoing it on my macbook pro.

      I will try to add more hand gestures I though sitting still to get my point across would look more profesional but I guess I was wrong.Also I only have one hand that fully works one Is messed up from a car wreck I had when I was 5.

      Originally Posted by mattjay View Post

      Try to make your video as professional as possible as noted above. the more people are impressed with your video the more they will likely be impressed with your free product.

      thank you Matt I appreciate it.

      Originally Posted by gcbmark20 View Post

      Hi Peter,

      You have made the most important step & that is to take action!

      Show me someone who gets it right the first time anyway.

      Yeah you could be more passionate with your message but
      as long as you try to be yourself & get your message across
      you can only get better.

      Look around to see how other successful marketers are getting
      their messages across & use that as a base to get your message
      across to your market.

      You took action & I congratulate you for that!

      Well done & all the best for the future.

      Regards
      Gavin
      Thans Gavin I'm trying to get better that 30 sec video took me like 30+ tries I tried to just sound normal or like myself more bit when i did i started to talk about how I dont know much about the IM yet and stuff and thought that might draw away viewers.









      Aslso how long should the video for a squeeze page be for best results?
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      • Profile picture of the author Fleki
        get two "daylight" lightbulbs from home depot (4 for $10). Put one the left side and one on the right side of your face. Look straight into the camera, capture shoulders and your face only and say one or two sentences at a time. Repeat them until they sound good. Record ALL OF IT.

        Then change the frame (include more than just shoulders) and repeat it. Change the "I hope that this helps you..." to "inside, you will find things that have helped people build their business....". You need a script that screams confidence.

        Edit everything. You just need a simple cut and paste editor. Keep the best shots and throw away the rest.

        Compare to the video that you just posted. Make adjustments. Make another video, compare with the one I just described. Post them here. Take some more notes from everyone's input.

        Great job, by the way.
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  • Profile picture of the author peter800
    I fixed It a Little more am I heading in the right direction or am I still way off.

    Thanks for all your tips!

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    • Profile picture of the author Fleki
      Definitely better than the first one, however, I think some of the information is delivered too slow or irrelevant if you just want them to fill out the form. Some of it should probably be moved to the redirect page if you have a video on it too.
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      • Profile picture of the author peter800
        Originally Posted by Fleki View Post

        Definitely better than the first one, however, I think some of the information is delivered too slow or irrelevant if you just want them to fill out the form. Some of it should probably be moved to the redirect page if you have a video on it too.
        So then should i simply say somthing like hey guys thanks for you intrest in my free ebook all you need to do to get it is fill out your name and email in the form below?
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        • Profile picture of the author Fleki
          Originally Posted by peter800 View Post

          So then should i simply say somthing like hey guys thanks for you intrest in my free ebook all you need to do to get it is fill out your name and email in the form below?
          No, you should definitely mention all of the reasons why they should sign up and how they will benefit from it. Just don't waste anyone's time telling them how you've failed to reach some unrealistic goal in the past. If you want to - tell them about some breakthrough point after which you succeeded, if you have one to talk about.
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    • Profile picture of the author Rbtmarshall
      Originally Posted by peter800 View Post

      I fixed It a Little more am I heading in the right direction or am I still way off.

      Thanks for all your tips!

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      way off man.

      its not the sound, video composure, nor lighting.


      goodluck
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    • Profile picture of the author retsced
      Originally Posted by peter800 View Post

      I fixed It a Little more am I heading in the right direction or am I still way off.

      Thanks for all your tips!

      Thank You For Your Intrest - YouTube
      Hey Peter, try to inject a little bit more enthusiasm into your message. You don't come across as a person who's passionate about your subject at all. Speak with confidence and project your voice a little more. Too many long pauses between sentences for a video of such a short length.

      Since the video is only a minute and a half long, why not write out the script of what exactly you're going to say and memorize it. Then present the message with passion, confidence and enthusiasm. Go for a run, do a little exercise or just jump around your living room for a minute or two to raise your energy levels and adrenalin - and then sit down to create the video

      You may be the most passionate guy in the world, but your audience will not get that impression from watching the video. More energy needed man.

      P.S... Do not read from a script if you create one. Memorize it (it's only a short message anyway) and let it flow naturally, but make sure you present the message with energy and clarity. First impressions are important.
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  • Profile picture of the author Rbtmarshall
    good that you made it, but you come off as unsure about what you are doing. why would you want to learn something from someone who is unsure about what it is they are doing? also describe some of the benefits. " how to start, how to grow, and how to run your business" that is very vague.

    You said its a video squeeze page. That should be no different than the average sales letter. except in video, not print.



    hello guys I am just finally starting to get into list building. I want my list to know that I care what they think and im not just trying to sell sell sell to them but really help them grow their business to a whole new level.
    ok... but your video does not come off that way at all.
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  • Profile picture of the author E. Brian Rose
    If you want a sugar coated review, skip this post and these five suggestions...

    1. You don't sound confident. Your voice influxes at the end of your sentences, leading me to believe you are questioning what you are saying.

    2. You lack enthusiasm. If you're not excited about your stuff, then why should I be?

    3. The video composition is bad. Frame your shot better. Also, light yourself better. Dark is bad.

    4. Give some highlights of what they are about to receive. Sure it's a freebie, but you are still selling them on it. Bottom line is you want their email address as payment, so you have to sell them and close them, just as you would a cash sale.

    5. Write a script and memorize it. If you sway from the lines, no problem, but at least you will not appear to be searching for words.
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    • Profile picture of the author retsced
      Originally Posted by E. Brian Rose View Post

      If you want a sugar coated review, skip this post and these five suggestions...

      1. You don't sound confident. Your voice influxes at the end of your sentences, leading me to believe you are questioning what you are saying.

      2. You lack enthusiasm. If you're not excited about your stuff, then why should I be?

      3. The video composition is bad. Frame your shot better. Also, light yourself better. Dark is bad.

      4. Give some highlights of what they are about to receive. Sure it's a freebie, but you are still selling them on it. Bottom line is you want their email address as payment, so you have to sell them and close them, just as you would a cash sale.

      5. Write a script and memorize it. If you sway from the lines, no problem, but at least you will not appear to be searching for words.
      hahha great minds think alike Brian. I swear I didn't just repeat what you said in my own words
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    I would have to agree, with all the comments above. Good Luck!
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  • Profile picture of the author peter800
    Thanks guys the problem Im having is Iam not too sure what to give away for free to the list.
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    • Profile picture of the author Fleki
      Originally Posted by peter800 View Post

      Thanks guys the problem Im having is Iam not too sure what to give away for free to the list.
      Then don't spend another second until you know that. The message will be either too generic or too irrelevant if you don't know what you're giving away. The delivery will probably reflect some confidence that it lacks, if you do it after you decide what you're giving away.

      Maybe make another post about what to give away...
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      Originally Posted by peter800 View Post

      Thanks guys the problem Im having is Iam not too sure what to give away for free to the list.

      Do you know why most newbies don't make enough money from their email marketing efforts? It's simply because "the value of your subscribers is in DIRECT proportion to the value you give to them" Low quality advice = low quality subscribers.

      So, I can almost guarantee that if your free report doesn't blow them away, you'll either be forgotten about, or worse yet, you'll be remembered as the guy who gave them rubbish content.

      If you have no experience in this market I suggest you rethink what you're doing. You don't have to start off in a market full of hyped up nonsense and cynics who are wary of everyone they come into contact with. You'll struggle to make any kind of impact if you don't know anything about this market.

      Surely this will fall on deaf ears anyway :rolleyes:
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  • Profile picture of the author thedanbrown
    Get some movement in there, turn on a light, rehearse the video before so you don't have to read anything, and try to have something weird, funny, or "out of the norm" at the beginning to get them to consume the content of the video (so maybe you say the goals of them reading your ebook) and then give your call to action at the end "go ahead check out my ebook now"
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  • Profile picture of the author drewfioravanti
    The first thing you need to do is stop asking people's opinion and start testing. I use video for all of my squeeze pages because I found it converts 10% better than anything else I have tested.

    I have a crappy flip camera that I use and all I have is a crappy head shot. It works. Well.

    You do need to know what your freebie is going to be and tell them the benefits of it.

    Stop asking. Start testing.
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  • Profile picture of the author Paul Hill SEO
    I love the fact you have taken action on this and done it yourself. Try and apply the same level of passion to the video as that which motivated you to create it in the first place. I think a few of the guys have stated that no one gets it right first time so take your experience and move forward...

    A few things which I would take a look at in more detail are:
    • Rehearse - know your lines off by heart so that you can articulate them with fluidity and confidence
    • Lighting - A bit too dark
    • Face on - engage the audience more by looking straight down the lens at them
    • Be Passionate - even if your viewer does not want to engage in further interaction, leave them thinking "man this guy is enthusiastic"
    Having said all this, you have overcome the greatest challenge and had a go. Keep going with this mentality and good things will start to happen

    Best of luck with this and I hope you achieve what you are looking for.
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  • Profile picture of the author Marie Cody
    I think you really need to improve your video quality. Video presentation is good but it is dark. Maybe you can edit it to be more lighter.
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  • Profile picture of the author peter800
    thanks for your insight guys and gals I was about to give up yesterday but I am not going to give up like I have in the past.

    let me know what you think of this its just on a demo site that I had, and I need to get awebber, and fix up the video like you guys suggested. Other than that what do you guys think?




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