Slice and dice my offer

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How can this offer be improved upon? Thanks in advance for the input.
#dice #offer #slice
  • Profile picture of the author Dan C. Rinnert
    First off, the name "Wobbly Non-Profit" does not inspire confidence. Sounds like your expertise is in making non-profits wobbly or unstable, rather than helping them grow and so forth.

    Second, it's not entirely clear what the offer is. It says "Get your FREE copy of the Multiplying Good e-mail micro course here." But what is the course? You have "It's Easy as 123" below the signup box but it's not clear if that's what the course tells you or if that's just page filler or what. It's just not clear what the offer is. You haven't even tried to connect with the prospect, haven't defined a problem, haven't explained your solution and benefits. I have to click through to other pages on the site just to try to figure out what you're trying to offer and, by then, I'm distracted and may not return to the offer page.

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  • Profile picture of the author ReferralCandy
    I'm in total agreement with Dan.

    1: The name doesn't inspire confidence to begin with. I'm only clicking because you asked me to.

    2: I have no idea what it's about, and I can't tell from a cursory glance. What exactly are you offering? Tell us.

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  • Profile picture of the author Ron Killian
    Maybe it's me, but looks like some kind of religion or church. Or I am just to tired

    Every one is right, no clear message what you have.
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    • Profile picture of the author CyberAlien
      Originally Posted by Ron Killian View Post

      Maybe it's me, but looks like some kind of religion or church. Or I am just to tired
      Did the cross on the website give that away?
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  • Profile picture of the author Veo
    In a nutshell, if I or anybody else are not sure in couple of seconds what is it, what it does, what's in it for me, what to do next, then it's not good.

    Sorry friend, but the guys are right, it needs work! It can be and it must be improved significantly!
    Or drop it and move to something new.

    Don't be disappointed, just move forward! We all do that from time to time.

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  • Profile picture of the author Victor Edson
    It's tough to see what you're trying to accomplish. Are you targeting non profits or people who's like to help?

    The design is also too orange.. either the headline of the left sidebar would need to be switched in addition to the domain name, branding and other ideas mentioned here about presenting your offer better.

    We're not saying your idea or offer is bad... just your marketing approach.
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    • Profile picture of the author PhilSwain
      I agree with everyone as well

      1. Website needs some major updating. It isn't very well designed
      2. The Word "Wobbly" makes no sense for your website at all.
      3. I won't sign up for something if I don't know what it is

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  • Profile picture of the author MARKCT
    Thanks to all for your time and input-much appreciated! Low conversion rate + comments above = back to the drawing board for me. Any good resources to tap or sites to examine as I "remodel"? Thanks again.
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  • Profile picture of the author archie79
    You might go after a better squeeze page model.
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