Need Constructive Feedback - Is this too Narcissistic?

Hmmmm, seems like a legit business, but you might get mixed reactions here? Might have been better in the Business opp, section?


Yeah, l have done a few squeeze pages, and apart from Adwords being out of the question, (they correctly hammer pages like this) there are some changes you could consider.

• Firstly the video eventhough having relevant content, is way to long. I would edit it down as much as possible. The tropical goal setting part is good, but a bit shorter would be good.


As you can see by clicking on my sig, links, l tend to show the product first then motivate second, but that is just me.

• The text needs to be the same size and contrast, etc. Small, blurry text will put some customers off!

• The pic, of yourself needs some space for the text.

• Include the word free as much as possible, so free in headline, free downlaod, etc.

• I generally give them something, usually a free video series, and if you get rid of the name part of signing up, it will increase conversions by 10%.

• You can also increase signups or conversions by up to 30% by removing double optins, but that is up to you?

• As for selling up front, l did put a small clickable graphic for a related product up top, and it did get a sale, with the buyer not signing up, so, you would no doupt see a small increase in sales, but a possible decrease in signups?

• You could have a large arrow pointing towards the signup, and give it a minute or two, at the end of the video, since your signup form is easy to miss.

• I also wouldn't do the text in bold type, it gives the impression you are desperate or trying to hard.

• The rest is probably fine, just use common sense and clean it up as much as possible.

• I did skim the video here and there, but a more detailed description of exactly what the product is and how it works, would be good.

Signing up isn't too bad, especially if a relevant freebie is on the other side, but the product page give very little info, (maybe the video fills in the gap?) so the more info, the better.


Hope that l helped, good luck.

Shane

PS might be a good idea to disable the links for signup and product purchase, for feedback purposes. I don't think that the Mods, are crazy about promotional links outside of the sig, file?

This is exactly what I was looking for!. I just disable the sign up links while getting feedback. Thank you so much, I'm gonna go through and work on making the changes you suggested.

I'm using Squeezeninja so there are some things I don't have control over. I don't know if I can remove adding "name" in the sign up. I don't really need that so that would be great.

I copied and pasted from my webpage and it won't unbold, the wysiwyg editor is really limited, I can't get to the source to change it...I may have to retype from scratch but oh well. I def thought the same thing but couldn't change now you helped me make up my mind to fix it. haha.

the video on there is 18 minutes... what is an average retention rate vs length? 5 minutes, 10 minutes, 15?

Thanks again