Yo! Come bash my New Opt-in page - PLEASE!!??

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Just looking for some feedback before I start using this.

Wadda ya think? Here's the link:

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  • Profile picture of the author FudEnterprises
    Simple is better i would say, it took a bit for that video to load.

    Fud
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  • Profile picture of the author Andy Fletcher
    I'm a spelling and grammar nit so the video irritated me. You seem to mix upper and lower case letters without much consistency and use punctuation in weird ways throughout.

    I'd also consider putting a value on the report. Rather than saying its a free report, say its a $47 report that you're giving away for free.
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  • Profile picture of the author Desmond Ong
    Too much highlights on the words. Just highlight important points.

    Also, the video loads kinda slow on my end. You should consider using Brightclove.

    Otherwise everything else is great.
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  • Profile picture of the author mikemcmillan
    It's hard to bash a "winebuddy" wearing a tux!

    I thought it was great. I liked the text on the video and the music. I think it should work. But you asked for bashing--and I'm digging deep, I mean really deep to pull this one of of my arse--but the semicolon used here >> Get The: 21st Century Agent's Toolkit Now is grammatically incorrect.

    I would break it apart into two lines: Get The 21st Century & Agent's Toolkit Now.

    From your avatar, you look as if you would be a most proficient speaker. Have you thought about voicing over the words of text that are shown with the music lightly playing in the background?

    Anyway, I am a picky bas*ard. You did a great job. Well done.
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  • Profile picture of the author AlexMaroko
    Yeah, looks good! If I were going to change things, I'd throw in a headline, and maybe throw in a couple testimonials below too. But, like everything, keep testing it and find out what converts best in your market.
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  • Profile picture of the author Gene Pimentel
    Some people, including myself, have trouble viewing a wmv directly from a webpage (must install plugin, which I can't for reasons too lengthy to go into here). I would recommend converting to FLA.

    Originally Posted by winebuddy View Post

    Just looking for some feedback before I start using this.

    Wadda ya think? Here's the link:

    unreleased video
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  • Profile picture of the author LMC
    Hey,

    Maybe the entire page isn't loading for me, but all I see is a video on the left and a opt-in page on the right... to me, especially in the niche of Real Estate, this looks very unprofessional.

    In my opinion you should add:

    - A header graphic
    - Video on your left
    - Opt-In on the Right
    - Arrows pointing to the opt-in
    - Under the Video, place some content on the left for the "readers" as well as SEO
    - On the right hand side of the content place bullets for what they can expect to read, and maybe a sample.
    - Then a footer

    I made a quick visual for you.

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    • Profile picture of the author Jillian Slack
      I agree with the random upper and lower case usage and some punctuation issues.

      Also, all of the copy is shifted toward the right instead of being evenly spaced.

      LMC had some great ideas.

      Also, I'm not a real estate agent, but I'm not connecting the reason I would want to order this tool kit.

      What problems are you going to solve for your potential clients?

      There are several statements at the beginning of the slide show, but I'm not seeing them tie together with the kit.
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  • Profile picture of the author Steven Carl Kelly
    You'll find that your opt-ins will increase dramatically (very dramatically) if you add a voiceover to the video and not rely on text alone.
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  • Profile picture of the author TheRichJerksNet
    Very slow loading and on netscape it gives an issue of showing the video twice... Yeah I realize many dont use netscape anymore because AOL dropped it .. but hey I use what I have been used to all these years ..lol

    The page is kinda really simple with no title or heading..

    James
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  • Profile picture of the author Justin Humphries
    I think it looks good. Very simple, but effective. I think a headline could help in conversions. I think the video does most of the "talking" for you (I agree with Steven, voice over would help).
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    • Profile picture of the author davemiz
      lol looks a LOT like mine.

      I created this style optin page (by accident) when testing about 20 different types of squeeze pages for my relaunch in Dec.

      Out of all the variations, this style was the winner. Presented it at our mastermind meetings and gave it to kern for his last MC launch, it really kicked butt for him too.... so I gave it to some other marketing friends to test and it worked great for them also.

      here's some tips to hopefully bump up your response.

      headline actually got a lower conversion. (crazy eh?), I figured you didn't need one because the first frame of the video shows the title of the movie.

      all the rest of the responses while good, all DECREASED conversions. Remember the video does most of the 'heavy lifting' on this type of page.

      The copy is the call to action to get them to opt in.

      1. make the red arrow flush with the top of the page
      2. make the text area wider so its easier to read
      3. change the submit button to a graphic
      4. try removing the name field

      hope that helps.
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