Seeking Your Feedback on Compelling Headline

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Hi Guys

I would appreciate your feedback on this headline I'm thinking about using. It's for a revolutionary plant based anti-wrinkle cream that's clinically proven to reduce fine lines and wrinkles (it actually eliminates them but I'm not sure if I'm allowed to say that). I have lots of real before and after photographs. In the U.S. & Canada the product has a 180-day money back satisfaction guarantee. In Europe the money back guarantee is 90 days. How's this for a headline?

I Guarantee That You Will Look 10-20 Years Younger Within a Few Short Weeks! (without Risky Surgery) (In One Easy Step) (Without Any Hassle)

I look forward to your feedback.
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  • I really enjoy indulging in cosmetics, but that headline would not entice me to click on it. It sounds a bit desperate. Maybe you could list the benefits and key ingredients with a more subtle approach.
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  • Product is great for looking younger.
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    • I would keep it very simple and easy to remember

      "Look 10 years younger or its free"

      good luck with your project
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  • Thank you Jeremy. That's simple but great!
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  • Hi Paul, that's great too! I guess it's going to boil down to testing. Thank you!
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    • Hi Mairin,

      Yup, you've got some good ones there. Now it's time to split test 'em.

      Let us know which ones does best.

      Warmest regards,

      Paul
  • Run some split a/b tests using a few headline and see what performs the best.
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  • Thanks again for your help everyone. Paul, I'll do that.
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    Seeking Your Feedback on Compelling Headline

    Hi Guys I would appreciate your feedback on this headline I'm thinking about using. It's for a revolutionary plant based anti-wrinkle cream that's clinically proven to reduce fine lines and wrinkles (it actually eliminates them but I'm not sure if I'm allowed to say that). I have lots of real before and after photographs. In the U.S. & Canada the product has a 180-day money back satisfaction guarantee. In Europe the money back guarantee is 90 days. How's this for a headline?