How can i shorten my pitch?

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so i pitch people through FB messenger heres what how it goes:

"Hey i see you are part of a group on facebook, how are you doing today?

Thats great, so the reason for the message is would you mind if i asked you some questions about your music?

Great, so perhaps you can bring me up to date on your current wants and desires with your music

Thats great, so if you are like most people im sure you have some fears and frustrations with your music, perhaps you can bring me up to date on your current situation

Okay great, so i could give you some advice on marketing your music if you wanted in exchange for your email

Great, heres the advice....

*advice*

Let me know what you think..

Great, so are you interested in getting seen and heard by thousands?

okay great, would you like to set up a phone call tomorrow to discuss?

okay great, ill call you tomorrow.."

So how do i shorten this up and just make it so that im just getting appointments?
#pitch #shorten
  • Profile picture of the author [Justin]
    I noticed you're music, and it definitely has potential. I could get you thousands of views literally, message me if you want to know more.

    That's all I would say.

    I would have a squeeze page that they could sign up for and receive the free tip you're giving so when they message back I can just send them to the squeeze page.
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  • Profile picture of the author Jason Kanigan
    I'm confused.

    Didn't we go through this a month or two ago, with almost exactly the same start and finish?

    Did you apply anything that was recommended to you?

    People are not interested in unsolicited advice. That's the hint I'll give you now.
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  • Profile picture of the author cjsparacino123
    i took the advice, i changed my pitch questions based on the reccomendations from here... it worked fine, but now i dont want to spend a half hour on each person just typing and hoping to get an appointment, id rather just say hey, heres what i do, heres what i can do, would you like to set an appointment but without looking to salesy... thats why i came here lol
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    • Profile picture of the author [Justin]
      Originally Posted by cjsparacino123 View Post

      i took the advice, i changed my pitch questions based on the reccomendations from here... it worked fine, but now i dont want to spend a half hour on each person just typing and hoping to get an appointment, id rather just say hey, heres what i do, heres what i can do, would you like to set an appointment but without looking to salesy... thats why i came here lol
      I recommend not randomly messaging people on Facebook and focus more on websites and automation.
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    • Profile picture of the author Jason Kanigan
      Originally Posted by cjsparacino123 View Post

      i took the advice, i changed my pitch questions based on the reccomendations from here... it worked fine, but now i dont want to spend a half hour on each person just typing and hoping to get an appointment, id rather just say hey, heres what i do, heres what i can do, would you like to set an appointment but without looking to salesy... thats why i came here lol
      You shouldn't be spending 1/2 hour qualifying. It should take a few minutes.

      Your script here today sounds pretty much the same as the original. I looked it up before I commented. That's why you're getting the same results.
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  • Profile picture of the author SalesGod
    Tell them what you do, why your qualified, you'd like to give them some advice, and get there number. You should be messaging them as few words as possible to get there number. Then you call them and close them. Make it short and sweet, just enough info to spark interest and get them on the phone.
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