An actual prospecting email

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I ask all of my clients to send me any "sales" pitch they get. First, so I can use anything good, and also because you need a good laugh every now and again. Here is one that came in today:


Hi,


You are leaving money on the table...
This mail is a wake up call for you... that tells you to start send some traffic to your site. Right now you're losing 37% of potential costumers.

My name is XXXX and I'm sending you that mail from XXXXXXX.

You have a website and that is very good because with today competition if you don't have a website for you business then it's like you don't existent.
But a site by it self will not do you any good... it's like building a shop in the middle of no where and not telling anyone about it... You need to show that you site exists.

And we are here to help you with that...
We offer all kind of promotions to your site... SEO, PPC, media buys, email marketing, and so on...
We are a professional media company that will put you site on the top of the board.
We will build a special plan for your business that will take you business the max.


Wow! I better step up my game with fierce competition like this.


#actual #email #prospecting
  • Profile picture of the author Danielm
    Needs more periods :p
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  • Profile picture of the author Scitknot9
    hahah.....i've not long started on IM but I think even I could do better than that!!
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  • Profile picture of the author areevez
    Sheesh, nightmare of grammar! That was pretty bad, too much 'IM' lingo. SEO, PPC, MEDIA BUYS, what do business owners care about that? They dont wanna hear what you can do, they wanna hear what you can do for their business.
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  • Profile picture of the author areevez
    Thought I'd share one that my client sent me...It was actually a pretty good deal if she took it LOL he offered bartering instead of the $1200 per month she pays me.

    Hey -
    This may sound weird, but check this out and give me a call.

    Did you know your business is only coming up
    as number 13 for the keyword "virginia beach spa"
    on the google local search? (note: if it says "0" that means you don't show up AT ALL!)

    Needless to say, this is bad because Google only shows (at most) the top 7 results.

    This means that you are missing out on hundreds of customer searches a month! (Yikes!)

    I have an offer for you, but I can only do it for one Spa in the area, so let me know ASAP if you'd like to jump on it.

    I do internet marketing professionally on my own, and am now starting to do it for a handful of clients around here.

    I would like to trade some internet marketing (as in, get you to page one of google so these customers can see that you exist!) For some spa services (for my wife, we have got three little kids 2 and under and she deserves a little pampering).

    See, I need to expand my portfolio of testimonials, in order to really start marketing. And you need to get in front of these customers who are looking for you (Its like the yellowpages on steroids).

    I also do custom facebook fanpages, offer social media coaching, help with video marketing online, etc...

    If you are interested at all, let me know ASAP!

    All the Best,

    Sean

    Internet Marketing Consultant
    757-555-3410 (not real number)
    SeanThomasIMC.com (real website lol)
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    • Profile picture of the author IMguy123
      Originally Posted by areevez View Post

      Thought I'd share one that my client sent me...It was actually a pretty good deal if she took it LOL he offered bartering instead of the $1200 per month she pays me.

      Hey -
      This may sound weird, but check this out and give me a call.

      Did you know your business is only coming up
      as number 13 for the keyword "virginia beach spa"
      on the google local search? (note: if it says "0" that means you don't show up AT ALL!)

      Needless to say, this is bad because Google only shows (at most) the top 7 results.

      This means that you are missing out on hundreds of customer searches a month! (Yikes!)

      I have an offer for you, but I can only do it for one Spa in the area, so let me know ASAP if you'd like to jump on it.

      I do internet marketing professionally on my own, and am now starting to do it for a handful of clients around here.

      I would like to trade some internet marketing (as in, get you to page one of google so these customers can see that you exist!) For some spa services (for my wife, we have got three little kids 2 and under and she deserves a little pampering).

      See, I need to expand my portfolio of testimonials, in order to really start marketing. And you need to get in front of these customers who are looking for you (Its like the yellowpages on steroids).

      I also do custom facebook fanpages, offer social media coaching, help with video marketing online, etc...

      If you are interested at all, let me know ASAP!

      All the Best,

      Sean

      Internet Marketing Consultant
      757-555-3410 (not real number)
      SeanThomasIMC.com (real website lol)

      And what is wrong with that? Wives do need some pampering every now and then.
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      • Profile picture of the author areevez
        Originally Posted by IMguy123 View Post

        And what is wrong with that? Wives do need some pampering every now and then.
        True! But not enough to steal my client from me!!! LOL
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        • Profile picture of the author StarkContrast
          I suppose that's MY competition since that's where I live. No, no, it wasn't me. I'm Dave, not Sean....
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    • Profile picture of the author robd1302
      Originally Posted by areevez View Post

      Did you know your business is only coming up
      as number 13 for the keyword "virginia beach spa"
      on the google local search? (note: if it says "0" that means you don't show up AT ALL!)
      I would think this line would make it painfully obvious to every recipient that this email is being sent by an auto-sender and not a person.

      Though auto-senders may have their place, I can't imagine that too many people get good business generated from them. So many clients tell me that they receive dozens of emails a week about this stuff, and that mine was the first email they got that was actually written directly to them.
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  • Profile picture of the author areevez
    You live where? Va beach?
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  • Profile picture of the author areevez
    LOL Just signed her on a couple weeks ago
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    • Profile picture of the author StarkContrast
      Originally Posted by areevez View Post

      LOL Just signed her on a couple weeks ago
      Yes, I live in Va Beach.
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  • Back to the OP, that's awesome.

    "losing 37% of potential costumers"!

    Is that 37% of people who come to your business in costume, or 37% of the people who help you get dressed into costumes.

    Either way...I need more COSTUMERS!!!
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  • Profile picture of the author k60mall
    I got this one today.

    You have attained THE holy grail of website marketing.

    Do a Google search now on “compensation lawyer New York” and you will see that your website ranks at the very top of page 1 !!

    All we need to do is set a re-direct to your primary website and that’s it, you have the highest ranking possible for your website. An extra 5, 10 even 20 new clients a month - how much is that worth to your business ??

    Statistics show that the vast majority of people don’t go further than page 1 ranked sites and that the majority of these don’t go further than the first 5 ranked sites. Where is your primary site ranking ??

    Go2page one rents highly ranked websites for a single all inclusive fee of $600 per month, no hidden costs and no set term past the initial 3 months. It is simply the most cost effective way of marketing you business that you will find.

    Even better, we will re-work the current compensation lawyer New York template and content to reflect the corporate design and standards of your company at no additional charge.

    What do you have to lose? Even one new client will more than pay the cost of the site ! Why loose business to your competition just because their site ranks higher than yours?

    This is a first time, first come first serve opportunity. Reply now to secure your page 1 ranked site
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  • Profile picture of the author Fernando Veloso
    I get pitched all day long in some of my offline sites. Usually people try to sell me:

    a) SEO
    b) PPC
    c) Email Marketing

    What is funny is 99% of these pitches comes in ENGLISH and my sites are Portuguese! Oh and they send the same email 3-4 times per week. Only proves they are using automate scrappers to grab/send emails and they are ignorants to send EN emails to a PT market.

    Ahahha
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    People make good money selling to the rich. But the rich got rich selling to the masses.
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  • Profile picture of the author RentItNow
    Well at least they are making an effort. The problem is the content is the same as every other business. Nothing stands out (yes besides the bad grammar). It's like putting something out for the sake of putting it out. No focus on customer needs.
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    I have no agenda but to help those in the same situation. This I feel will pay the bills.
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