Looking for some feedback on my first draft of a sales letter...

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First draft of the first sales letter I have ever wrote. Had it for email in mind but I feel like it is easily adaptable for direct mail letters or postcards.

It is for Bob Ross' 9x12 postcard system.

Some of you can probably guess what books I have read...

Any and all feedback is appreciated!









#offline marketing #draft #feedback #letter #sales
  • I think this is pretty darn good! If you're in WNY ( Amherst, Buffalo, Williamsville, Clarence, south towns) be prepared to compete with a warrior I know! :-)
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  • i came in here thinking this was gonna suck because most first timers dont know anything about solid copy.

    Good work, for your first letter. I enjoyed it. Direct mail converts at a higher rate then email but email is far cheaper.

    split Test your list to see if they reply better to email, or snail mail.

    Good luck

    Jonathan Webb
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    • You're in the wrong forum, and I mean that nicely. Check out the Copywriters subforum here. Post up, and be humble. There are a handful of guys in here that know copywriting (myself included), but most (myself included) couldn't hold a candle to the guys that do it for a living. There are going to be subtle ideas and nuances that you won't see, even if this were your tenth or hundredth letter. Check them out and you'll see what I mean. Just be prepared to have your stuff ripped to shreds.

      Trust me - you're looking for this copy to make you money. It isn't a love-in. Look for the most brutal, pointed, knowledgeable critics you can find.
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