Need opinions on a video script

by Garble
1 replies
I'm making a video to send in follow-up emails to businesses that I cold call. The objective is to get my foot in the door with these companies by selling them a mobile website. My video shows their website on a mobile phone and demonstrates the difficulty using it from such a small screen. I then go on to quote some poll results from google:

  • 52% of users said that a bad mobile experience made them less likely to engage with a company
  • 48% said that if a site didn't work well on their smartphones, it made them feel like the company didn't care about their business
"Is that the impression you would like to leave on your customer base? Wouldn't you like your website site to reflect the professionalism of your company?"
And I proceed to show them how their website COULD look on a mobile device.

My concern is the tone of what I've written. I want to trigger some pain in the prospects, but not insult them or get their backs up.

What do you think?
#opinions #script #video
  • Profile picture of the author Marty S
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    • Profile picture of the author Garble
      Hi Marty, thanks for the input. Funny I should find your response right now - I just came across one of your videos on youtube 10 minutes ago when I was searching for video marketing.

      I agree about the amount of time for these videos. But I'm in bad need of clients right now, so I'm willing to put in the extra effort during off hours.

      I've created a video template with a chroma key screen replacing the screen of a cell phone image. A couple of photoshop macros and batch processes automate most of the process so I can drop the image of a prospect's website into the video without having to position or align anything. A custom video takes 5 min including rendering and uploading. I'll do a dozen each night for a month and see if it helps my business. If it's worth the effort and expense, the process could easily be taken care of by a VA.
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