Pls review this landing page

by Rajul kaushik

Posted: 12 years ago 2 replies

Pls take a look at this new landing page I wish to use:
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FYI, i own this co and want to use it for ppc / lead generation. Oxynet solution provides turnkey solutions for indoor air quality problems prevailing in all kinds of indoor spaces whether homes or offices, theatres or malls, hospitals or airports etc etc - any indoor space - even workshops and factories.

Kindly take a detailed look at it, the design and the content, headline etc and let me have your feedback.
Your suggestion on content, healine, look and fel will be highly appreciated. Thanks.

#landing #page #pls #review

OutOfThisWord 12 years ago

Rajul...

...you are asking the reader to work to hard to try and find out what is being offered and why they should read further.

Your landing page must pass the three second rule, meaning the reader must quickly get hooked or they click next.

It seems like you've got some good reasons for people to listen to your offer, but they are buried.

Right now your landing page is like a bazaar where the reader is asked to mill about and maybe find a gem.

Most people will not invest the time, better you invest in constructing a good clear offer and piling on the benefits in a logical sales presentation.

Good luck!
- Thanks
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