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Forum: Copywriting 9th July 2009, 08:21 AM
Replies: 30
Views: 1,391
Posted By retz
Re: SQUEEZE PAGE Converting AT 10%!! - Tips Please?

There is no sense of urgency, there is no compelling reason for me to want 2,000 twitter followers, you do not explain the benefits of this. In a good squeeze page, the writer reminds us of what we...
Forum: Copywriting 9th July 2009, 08:15 AM
Replies: 11
Views: 693
Posted By retz
Re: first page critique

Numerous errors in the copy - including using the plural of "women" instead of "woman." It's tedious and silly to read, it's not believable, and any guy dumb enough to buy that book based on those...
Forum: Copywriting 9th July 2009, 08:05 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,138
Posted By retz
Re: So is my first sales letter complete crap?

I think people are being incredibly charitable here. That web site has absolutely everything wrong with it, from the poorly written copy (with inexcusable grammatical and punctuation errors) to the...
Forum: Copywriting 8th July 2009, 08:17 PM
Replies: 52
Views: 2,379
Posted By retz
Re: Sales page critique

Here are some ideas of how to make the disaster story a little more interesting:

Dear Bride To Be,

This was it: the day I had dreamed of since I was a little girl. My mother was in tears, my...
Forum: Copywriting 8th July 2009, 08:01 PM
Replies: 52
Views: 2,379
Posted By retz
Re: Sales page critique

(regarding the web page):)
Hi Barakos,

Let me give you my impressions as a woman, an artist, a writer, and a person who has bought many ebooks online.

First, I hate the dark purple.
...
Forum: Copywriting 8th July 2009, 07:31 PM
Replies: 7
Views: 675
Posted By retz
Re: Very short copy for critique.. (headline)

First of all, fear should be singular and not plural. (Fear, not Fears.)

I also think a little rhyme might be catchy, like "Free Video Reveals the #1 Secret To Overcoming the Fear of Changing...
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