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Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 03:51 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By max5ty
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

Dude, see what you wrote in the quote?

You actually started writing a real sales letter!

Like you were talking to a friend...wow, you actually sound confident...you go.

Congrats!!!

Now...
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 03:29 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

I'm looking at your copy from the perspective of:

What would be considered relevant traffic?

For instance...

If you got a solo on Bob Proctor's list, would those men be buyers?

Nope.
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 03:23 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By Tim R
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

Hey Steve,

I only watched the first few minutes of your video, but it seems that you're focused primarily on the success with women aspect. I'm just wondering why you've chosen that headline...
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 03:06 PM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By ewenmack
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

True Steve.

Now the thing about the brain is it is naturally
lazy and scrolling down to find them is hard work.

Now if you brought the biggest and most appealing
outcome to your market to...
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 11:41 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By Mark Pescetti
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

You have a video at the top? Doesn't play on an ipad. Epic miss.

Anyway...

I just wrote a video script for a hypnosis product.

The whole, "You just need confidence" angle is NOT the way to...
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 10:42 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By ewenmack
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

Steve, there is no mention of a specific desired result.

Like, for for example, text your wife into bed.

It starts from there and you build your case
for delivering that promise.

Best,
Ewen
Forum: Copywriting 23rd November 2013, 05:42 AM
Replies: 19
Views: 723
Posted By Steve The Copywriter
Re: What do you think about my new sales page?

I haven't had a chance to watch the video.

But the headline is a bit weak. Its very similar to thousands of others. All stating the "power of the subconscious mind" making your product a "me to"...
Forum: Copywriting 7th December 2012, 03:47 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 901
Posted By Shazadi
Re: Critics wanted: What's your opinion on this letter?

Have you seen this sales page? (NSFW AT ALL): Secrets of Erotic Hypnosis (http://www.masterful-lover.com/erotichypnosis/)

I would take some pointers from whoever wrote that. Things to use:

-...
Forum: Copywriting 7th December 2012, 01:03 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 901
Posted By travlinguy
Re: Critics wanted: What's your opinion on this letter?

First, you asked for criticism. This isn't personal.

There was a time when I did comprehensive reviews for free, many here did. But I don't do that anymore because most people aren't really...
Forum: Copywriting 7th December 2012, 11:38 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 901
Posted By max5ty
Re: Critics wanted: What's your opinion on this letter?

Maybe it's just me...

I always chuckle when someone is selling an ebook and they say copies are limited.
Forum: Copywriting 7th December 2012, 07:08 AM
Replies: 16
Views: 901
Posted By nawshale
Re: Critics wanted: What's your opinion on this letter?

Hi, checked your work and it seemed interesting at first but as I read and go through every paragraph, it made me stop reading because it's too wordy. just try to paraphrase and go straight to the...
Forum: Copywriting 6th December 2012, 05:52 PM
Replies: 16
Views: 901
Posted By sethczerepak
Re: Critics wanted: What's your opinion on this letter?

Hi Steve,

Wow, it's not solid gold but I gotta say I was bracing myself for a complete casserole of nonsense. This is not half bad for a newbie, I think you're off to a decent start. I don't have...
Forum: Copywriting 16th October 2012, 12:25 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 925
Posted By JamesColin
Re: My New "Outside The Box" Squeeze Page. What Do You Think? (Need critiques)

Well he's dead while Bill Gates is enjoying his retirement.. So who won really?
Think different, sure, but also do what works. :-)

Also your squeeze page is fine for me, I don't deny it it's...
Forum: Copywriting 15th October 2012, 04:03 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 701
Posted By Joshster
Tip Copywriting: The easy way to stop your fear of it (for newbies)

Some big lessons I’ve learned (from a newbies perspective):

Copywriting is important, yes. But split testing is also important.

So the big lesson for me was: Don’t stress out about...
Forum: Copywriting 15th October 2012, 08:28 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 925
Posted By davemiz
Re: My New "Outside The Box" Squeeze Page. What Do You Think? (Need critiques)

sorry, but the copy sucks.... its vague, generic and not hitting what the market really wants, plus who uses that kinda page?

have you surveyed your list to find out exactly what they're looking...
Forum: Copywriting 15th October 2012, 07:11 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 925
Posted By sethczerepak
Re: My New "Outside The Box" Squeeze Page. What Do You Think? (Need critiques)

I think what's he's suggesting stevealtaman is that the invitation and the link to download need to be above the fold, preferably on the upper right hand corner.

Also, you've got too many...
Forum: Copywriting 14th October 2012, 02:18 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 925
Posted By ewenmack
Re: My New "Outside The Box" Squeeze Page. What Do You Think? (Need critiques)

You are saying money and career success as well, the top guys don't...
that's the difference.

Best,
Ewen
Forum: Copywriting 19th August 2012, 04:17 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 765
Posted By natas105
Re: My First Real Squeeze Page. Let me know what you think

pm sent with some tips you could use.
Forum: Copywriting 19th August 2012, 02:30 AM
Replies: 9
Views: 765
Posted By CharismaticMannequin
Re: My First Real Squeeze Page. Let me know what you think

Steve...

At one point I was your target market - I used to buy into tons of this stuff so I know how the ideal prospect feels.

1.) Your biggest and most fatal flaw on that video...you start...
Forum: Copywriting 20th June 2012, 08:57 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 899
Posted By Mark Andrews
Re: My first ever sales letter [Video] Please critique to your best ability

Just take the advice on the chin and move forwards. I think it's fairly obvious you don't really want to lie to other people, you just allowed your ignorance of how to position yourself to let you...
Forum: Copywriting 20th June 2012, 06:47 PM
Replies: 12
Views: 899
Posted By sovereignn
Re: My first ever sales letter [Video] Please critique to your best ability

You should give out a few free copies or contact some people in the Niche and get REAL reviews

Copy isn't awful.... But it could be a lot better

It didn't really capture my attention and the...
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