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Forum: Copywriting 4th March 2016, 03:48 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By wecoach
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

If you dont need it, sell it. I ask you because, if it is a IWF approved barbell, then you can ask for 250us$ or maybe more, but if it is just a generic barbell not.
Forum: Copywriting 4th March 2016, 11:02 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By wecoach
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

As Olympic Weightlifting coach let me tell you that a 16 years old barbell is usually out of the new bad quality chinese barbell market, you should use that in your text. May you tell me barbell...
Forum: Copywriting 3rd March 2016, 01:57 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By dmaster555
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

I know what niche you're targeting. I am part of that community myself.

But you say you got "heaps" of interest, but has it sold?

Nope.

Welcome to learning copywriting.

No need to get...
Forum: Copywriting 3rd March 2016, 01:31 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By DABK
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

What you said notwithstanding, your text doesn't even begin to hint to the reason people should buy your bar. Just because they're gym freaks and you have a barbell to sell isn't sufficient. There...
Forum: Copywriting 3rd March 2016, 01:14 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By Kay King
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

I suggest you do a google sarch for

20kg olympic sized barbell

Then look at the copy and facts on some of those sites. Those sites treat potential buyers like "workout experts" - rather than...
Forum: Copywriting 2nd March 2016, 10:57 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By dmaster555
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

The attitude alone would probably turn a lot of people off just because they don't want to meet you lmao.
Forum: Copywriting 2nd March 2016, 03:13 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By Princess Balestra
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

It is AR-NEE or SHWAR-TZUNN-EGGUAR.

Who in hell is 'Arnold'?

An' I figure The Rock is a better contemporary mass-appeal match than Hogan.

(Prolly if you are sellin' barbells, there is some...
Forum: Copywriting 2nd March 2016, 02:29 PM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By DABK
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

I know why you're selling it.

I don't know why I, or anyone else, for that matter, should buy it.

There's writing there, but no copywriting.
Forum: Copywriting 2nd March 2016, 11:13 AM
Replies: 21
Views: 1,798
Posted By splitTest
Re: Copy Critique: "If Arnold & Hulk had a baby; this barbell would be their son’s D"

Why do so many new copywriters think it's all about "creativity" and "attitude"?... If they're not swaggering in making Godfather and gun references, they're flippant and snide like the copy you've...
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