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Forum: Copywriting 19th April 2012, 03:31 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By ASCW
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

Bad headline - and its also not congruent with your big promise.

1st on Google?
Tons of traffic?
Power of RSS unleashed?
WHICH IS IT?!

Also your opening paragraph and especially opening...
Forum: Copywriting 18th April 2012, 04:28 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By Salesmanship In Print
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

Oddly enough, in my opinion you'd have a better page if you scrapped almost everything on the top half of the page, and simply started off with the section just below the part that says "Stop Right...
Forum: Copywriting 17th April 2012, 11:15 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By maestro_mr
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

My suggestion :

"How would you like to have ______________ in ________(time limit)"
"Who else want to have _______________ "

Get their attention quickly, plus maybe you can use graphic...
Forum: Copywriting 17th April 2012, 06:33 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By davemiz
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

offer isn't clear.... its not clear why i need this... why i'm struggling without it...

what do you have?

why do i need it?

whats it going to do for me?

what do i need to do to get it?
Forum: Copywriting 17th April 2012, 01:54 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By Will Edwards
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

My suggestion: change ...

"Have you always been trying to rank your website on Page 1 of Google?."

I think this might be better ...

"Are You Frustrated, Exasperated or Downright Sick and...
Forum: Copywriting 16th April 2012, 10:46 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By Ken Hoffman
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

There's too much going on graphic-wise. If you take all that away, there's really not enough copy to convince anyone. Replace the headline with the next sentence about the "rat race." That line is...
Forum: Copywriting 16th April 2012, 03:43 PM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By valuecreator
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

the only things I would change is:

- the header. this is your prime real easte, your hook. I would reduce the name of your product to something that fit in the left corner. for the rest of the...
Forum: Copywriting 16th April 2012, 08:45 AM
Replies: 14
Views: 902
Posted By Shadowflux
Re: Sales Copy Opinion required

Hi!

I took a look at your copy and here are a few notes, in no particular order:

I think it looks pretty good, it isn't overly long, the graphics are nice and there isn't too much hype.

You...
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