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Forum: Copywriting 22nd June 2010, 04:35 PM
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Posted By K.serrattan
Re: Please critique this email!

Firstly, you've come a long way Prawn. And don't thank me, you did the work and soaked up the information in order to create a very convincing script. Being a good student in all aspects is the hard...
Forum: Copywriting 22nd June 2010, 02:18 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By RochesterRoberts
Re: Please critique this email!

GREAT JOB PRAWN!! This is a lot better. This is something tangible and real enough to read and hook people into the "convo". You got me hooked , now reel me in big guy or girl.:D
Forum: Copywriting 22nd June 2010, 07:45 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By Anita Ashland
Re: Please critique this email!

Agreed.

A story needs the following:

* A setting (a time and a place).
* A beginning, middle and end. You can leave off the end if you want to create a cliffhanger/open loop.

Also, an...
Forum: Copywriting 22nd June 2010, 02:28 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By The Copy Nazi
Re: Please critique this email!

Version 2 is a totally different beast. Much, much better. Now you're getting it. But substitute "My Story" for something way more interesting. Nobody cares about your story. Unless you hook them....
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 07:59 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By K.serrattan
Re: Please critique this email!

Was going good until we got to here. I almost laughed out loud, it was like I was listening to a real guy ( I really got into the script you had before the above quoted paragraph, I thought it was...
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 04:22 PM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By K.serrattan
Re: Please critique this email!

Glad I could help! Just a couple more pointers here:

An understanding of Pathos, represents an appeal to the audience's emotions (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Emotion).

Spend some time thinking...
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 01:57 PM
Replies: 4
Views: 813
Posted By MillionDollarCopy
Re: Give me some BASE clue..

Hey Niuhmerch!

Good for you for taking the initiative to try out something new that you feel passionately about! I've been copywriting successfully for a few years now, and from my own experience,...
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 08:56 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By The Copy Nazi
Re: Please critique this email!

I was bored from the off but when I got to "Amazing" I tuned completely out. I can't begin to tell you how poor this email is. Starting with the completely cheesy "You're probably ready to dive right...
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 08:17 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By RickDuris
Re: Please critique this email!

Let me ask a sincere question:

If YOU got that email, would you feel compelled to buy?

I would say you have to heat up the prospect with a series of emails, approaching them from all sorts of...
Forum: Copywriting 21st June 2010, 03:15 AM
Replies: 23
Views: 1,043
Posted By K.serrattan
Re: Please critique this email!

Hey Prawn,

I've tested some copywriting conversion and such, I am no pro, but here is my input.

I would use: Like many suffering to lose weight

Are you saying that your system allows one to...
Forum: Copywriting 16th September 2009, 12:47 PM
Replies: 56
Views: 3,288
Posted By The Copy Nazi
Re: Attention Copywriters- What is your favorite headline of all time?

"They Laughed When I Sat Down at the Piano...but When I Started to Play - They Shat Themselves."

ⓒ malcolm lambe
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