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Unread 28th Aug 2012, 01:59 PM   #1
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[Reviewers Wanted] For a new weight loss/health/fitness related product.
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Hey everybody!

I'm just getting started in internet marketing so I don't know much about it, but I'm fairly passionate about health and fitness. I've wrote a simple report and ebook that I was hoping some of you could review and tell me what I should do next.

You can pm me or reply to this tread.

Thanks for the help!
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Unread 29th Aug 2012, 11:46 AM   #2
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I can give it a gander and let you know what I think.

If you do any kind of blogging and want to try the next big thing, PM me.
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Ok thanks, the files are attached, I'll probably remove them later.

I'm not much of a writer so I may be looking for someone to rewrite them for me if you think its worth it.

I will also be looking for someone to write a salespage for me, maybe.

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They are nice and thorough. The right length without being too long and boring. Aesthetically I suggest changing the top font to something more professional looking, and perhaps add photos to make it less of a dull document. People have short attention spans.

But it seems like people will find it helpful.
That's my general thought. Someone else may want to be more in depth.

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Thanks for the review.

I was a little worried they are to short and don't have enough content but if you think its good I'll leave it. I have a lot more information I could add to it but I wanted to save it for other products.
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Well I would generally appreciate something that is not overly wordy. Others may feel differently.
There are pros and cons to all choices though.

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I'll have a look at it if you want.

Part-time model, part-time ghostwriter, fitness enthusiast, and medical student here

I can help with the wording, formatting of the e-book and even with the sales page

Let me know

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Hey man

The ebook is readable, and your intentions seem to be good. However...

People will understand what you are trying to say, but they will encounter many minor English mistakes. Like "There have been many books wrote about the dangers of what". It's "written", not "wrote", but then too, the structure is incorrect. Should have been "There are many books about...".

I am NOT trying to bash up your work; you've done what most people won't ever do in their IM career (creating a PDF; doing work), but you asked for positive criticism, and I am providing it (for free!).

There are also inaccurate information:

"When we eat food that has been cooked our bodies must draw from it's own limited supply of enzymes in order to digest food. The body has to call on the immune system to help digest the food, causing leukocytosis."

That's simply not true. The body produces as many enzymes as needed to digest the food we ingest (even if cooked) to a certain point of course, in normal adults and is not "used up". It remains unchanged at the end of the reaction (that's what an enzyme is, by definition). It does get recycled by the body to be used in other places (it's protein in nature). And the immune system does NOT help digest the food and does NOT cause leukocytosis.

You may want to review your points. Again, not bashing up. You did actual work, but you need to do a little bit more research.

Let me know if I can help

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Thanks very much for the reviews and the criticism! I will definitely be rewriting, redesigning and double checking everything I've done so far. This has been a HUGE help thanks again.
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