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Unread 27th Nov 2014, 03:52 AM   #1
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How To Get "Rock Star" Sales Copy Without Breaking The Bank
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Mr. John,

I really liked your copy. My eyes skimmed the bold copy right away and I went back and read it over again. Not boring in the slightest and I actually enjoyed reading it.

Mission accomplished on that level.

I think you could come up with a better headline, but it's still pretty darned good. I think you should try to come up with a twist on the "Rock Star" maven. I see quite a few ad copy writers that want to either be the next "bad boy" or rock star. I don't think you should drop it, just try to come up with a different angle on it.

There is a contradiction in your copy, though. At sub head in your deck copy, you put, "High-Converting Sales Copy. On The Double. At A Reasonable Rate."

Then later you have: Your target customers will come from every corner of the web (like sharks in a frenzy) in order to click, “Buy Now”!


If you are good enough to make a claim like that, why would you charge only reasonable rates?

So, in my opinion, take out the "reasonable rates". You' seem good enough to start making decent money, in my humble opinion.

Just my 2 cents.

God Bless,

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