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ok...this is just one page site.. i need your critique my fellow warriors

by Diver's
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I recently launched this site,

my site

I try to make it very simple and neat.. but, from your point of view is it convincing for people to buy my service.

Tell me what you think..and critique

Thank You in advance Warriors!

Shah a.k.a Diver's
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  • Profile picture of the author brandony
    Hey Shah,
    Overall I think it's a nice looking site. I would probably make the graphic a little shorter, so you can see more of the Call To Action above the fold, etc.
    But overall, looks good.
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  • Profile picture of the author Diver's
    Hi Brandon,

    Thanks for your suggestion... i do think the top banner is too big.. got to make some changes...

    Thanks
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  • Profile picture of the author Zentech
    Disclosure: I'm not a designer, so take my comments in that regard with a grain of salt.

    As a copywriter, the first thing I noticed is that you do not appear to have any appealing or compelling sales writing on the page. I understand you're probably going for the brief, short page approach, but you need more than this - or if you want to keep it this brief, you need to make it a great deal more powerful.

    In terms of design, in my amateur designer opinion, it's a pretty nice-looking site.
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  • Profile picture of the author Diver's
    Hi Zentech...

    what you say is very true... i havent done much in the salescopy part, i was focusing on short and brief first look.

    A great deal more powerful? i could use some help on that aspects.. Thanks Zentech for your comment. I'm not an expert in writing compelling sales copy...but i do provide my video in action link.

    i think i will elaborate on that aspect... Thanks..Zentech

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  • Profile picture of the author Zentech
    Cool. Let me know if you need any help.
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    • Profile picture of the author All Night Cafe
      I'm not impressed at all. One page yes but
      not appealing. It just screams I want to sell
      you.

      Go back look at doing 2 or 3 pages.

      Spread things out.
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      • Profile picture of the author Diver's
        Originally Posted by All Night Cafe View Post

        I'm not impressed at all. One page yes but
        not appealing. It just screams I want to sell
        you.

        Go back look at doing 2 or 3 pages.

        Spread things out.
        Thanks for your comment my friend. I actually have a blog section behind it with several articles posted to EZA and linking back to it. That's how traffic is generated.

        Yes, it does look like screaming for sales at a glance on the main page.

        DO you have any idea how to tone down it a little bit. Zentech suggested several selling pharagraphs...which think should solve the -direct selling- message..

        Anyway, the blog is here

        Thank You All..
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  • Profile picture of the author weaveronline
    One suggestion is to try embedding those videos rather than just writing the links ,
    Layout seems okay , but content had to be modified little more,
    And how abt putting an order form in another page..straight away allowing the users to make the payment? Hope this helps!
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    • Profile picture of the author asnorth
      Hi
      Given the nature of the service you are trying to promote to me I was very suprised you don't have a promotion video on the page.
      Other than that a nice enough template, although I would prefer it centered in the browser window.
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  • Profile picture of the author stevecane
    I'd install wordpress and use it to build a site. Look at your site next to Amazon.... which would you buy from?

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