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My latest and most professional design. (Critique?)

by Neodism
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I've been trying to create a professional site for my SMS business I am looking to start. I had failed time after time until I created this one with a little help from a tutorial. Of course, I added my own touch to it, but still. It' not exactly original, haha.

Anyways. What do you think? What could I improve on? Do you think it looks professional enough to market to businesses in my small town?

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  • Profile picture of the author stephaniek
    Hi Larches, unfortunately your link is broken.
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    Woman: How much do I owe you for the sketch?
    Picasso: 5000 francs.
    Woman: But it only took you 5 minutes!
    Picasso: No madam, it took me all my life.

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  • Profile picture of the author Neodism
    Woops! Accidentally deleted it. Try again now!

    I went ahead and unprofessionally sliced it up and just used images. I can't afford to do it any other way and I don't have the patience to learn. So it's at my homepage. Only the index is done. Wildfire SMS Marketing
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  • Profile picture of the author TigerNone
    I think it looks pretty good. Here are some changes I would make:

    - Change your line spacing to 1.5 times the font size. This will put more space in between each line and make the text easier to read in paragraphs. It looks like you have done this for some paragraphs, but not all.

    - If you are going to use images for the whole website, then you might as well go with a nicer font for the body copy. Look at something like Myriad Pro, or maybe Verdana. Also change the anti-aliasing on your font so that it looks smoother and not so pixelated.

    Overall looks good though.
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    • Profile picture of the author Neodism
      Originally Posted by TigerNone View Post

      I think it looks pretty good. Here are some changes I would make:

      - Change your line spacing to 1.5 times the font size. This will put more space in between each line and make the text easier to read in paragraphs. It looks like you have done this for some paragraphs, but not all.

      - If you are going to use images for the whole website, then you might as well go with a nicer font for the body copy. Look at something like Myriad Pro, or maybe Verdana. Also change the anti-aliasing on your font so that it looks smoother and not so pixelated.

      Overall looks good though.
      I can see how it would work better to have better spacing on all of my text. Thank you for that. I may take the time to change that up.

      On the font, I chose it to be arial(none) because I wanted it to appear like a regular site with text actually written in. I feel like it needs to look more like a standard website than a flyer. I wanted to use the most basic font there was. What say you?
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  • Profile picture of the author panamacat
    I think it looks good, but like TigerNone, most of my suggestions have to do with type:
    --definitely fix whatever is making the black type so spidery.
    --Don't center the copy under "How it works" and "Why choose us"....ragged right would be better. Ok to center the titles as you have.
    --Somewhere, spell out what SMS is..your typical small business person won't know.
    --Tighten up the copy somewhat...For example, the first sentence under "Why Choose Us" is awkward.
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  • Profile picture of the author Neodism
    Well. I've made some small changes. I am going to have to put a lot of work into it if I want to follow your complete advice, lol. And I'm just trying to get it presentable. Viewers will be directed there by no other means that my own request or a referral. Both of which, they should know what SMS marketing is upon landing on the page. If I sent them there, then I would have told them beforehand what it was I offered, and if someone else sent them there... well, same scenario.

    Smooth text.
    A little more spaced out.
    Revised "why choose us".

    Here.

    BTW. Here is my competitor's site.
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  • Profile picture of the author TigerNone
    I think it looks much better. The only thing that jumps out at me is that the "Actual Customer Testimonial" text is still jagged. I would smooth it like the other ones.

    Good job.
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  • Profile picture of the author logowarriors
    Its looking very good. You have done a great job. All the best man.
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