Critique My Squeeze Page Please

DavePalermo

14 years ago

If you are in need of a critique then it would be to add some back ground color.

Other than that it seems ok.

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mrmarketer1

14 years ago

Tweaks:
1) Add a graphic that visually represents the benefits or end benefits
2) Take out the period at the end of the headline as it stops the reader
3) Would personally take out "life changing" but its a personal / style thing

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jamiebarclay

14 years ago

I would put your opt in form above the fold. If you visitors have to scroll down you run the risk of losing them. Other than that nice work

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Ed Micah

14 years ago

I'm not sure about the Facebook signup form, but when I had it before, the box doesn't appear when an user is not logged in into Facebook at the time when they land your page...

Someone else please clarify, thanks

Other than that, it's clean - I like it.

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Alexa Smith

Banned 14 years ago

Yes, I think it's "clean", and good. Observations ...

I agree that you should definitely remove the period in the heading
I think you should spell out "Pay-Per-Click advertising" rather than "PPC" for the benefit of the newbies you hope to attract, some of whom won't know what "PPC" stands for
I think you need to split-test whether having the opt-in box above the fold increases the conversion rate
And my main point: I think it would look much more professional and serious, and increase the conversion rate, to have this squeeze page hosted on your own site rather than so visibly at 90secondsqueezepage.com, which many will think (and perhaps even rightly) looks a little unprofessional

If nothing else, if you're "teaching affiliate marketing", I think you need to accept no compromises when it comes to being (and being seen to be) in control of your business and not dependent on entirely unnecessary third-party services. Even when I was a newbie, that would possibly have been the reason I wouldn't have opted in, myself.

(I'm not logged in to Facebook and didn't see a Facebook signup form as mentioned by Ed above).

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mootonandy 14 years ago

Wow - thanks guys. I will take all that on board. As for hosting it myself, don't know how to do that yet so I took the easy option.
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sanhal

14 years ago

I think it would be good to have an image of your free report on the page.

I agree that the optin form should be higher up.

It can help to put the headline in quote marks. This is something you could split test.
I am not sure that the benefit your headline gives is strong enough.

I prefer to see a border around pages like this. To me it looks unfinished as it is.

Good luck with it.

Sandy

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by sanhal

I think it would be good to have an image of your free report on the page.

I agree that the optin form should be higher up.

It can help to put the headline in quote marks. This is something you could split test.
I am not sure that the benefit your headline gives is strong enough.

I prefer to see a border around pages like this. To me it looks unfinished as it is.

Good luck with it.

Sandy

I see, thanks.

What do you think the headline should be?

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DavePalermo 14 years ago

Here's a good bit o'advice....

Find a squeeze page that makes YOU want to optin and copy it.
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retsced

14 years ago

try your opt-in form to the right of the content instead of below.
I would create an eBook cover that looks professional and add it to the page (I'm confident you will get far more subs because of this, for obvious reasons)

Other than that. It's a basic, simple squeeze page that always converts well when marketed to newbies. I'd definitely put a professional book cover up there - It will make a difference.

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Matt Dog

14 years ago

I'll tell you honestly what I think.

It looks "ok", but especially since you are marketing to other marketers (who KNOW you want to make money off them and are consciously aware of that) you need to give them a reason to trust you since most of us have seen every trick in the book.

The problem is your squeeze page is a typical "see-it-everywhere" kind of squeeze page.

When Average Joe or Average Jill looks at that will they be impressed or are they gonna say "wow... another 'life changing report' that I have to sign up for...and I suspect it's gonna be a bunch of useless junk just like every other free report I've signed up for'"???

I'm not meaning to offend you only to help you.

I'm guessing "90secondsqueezepages.com" isn't your domain but you just have your squeeze page hosted there.

Have you thought of hosting it on your own site (or buying another site if you need to)?

There is a major benefit of having your own domain to host your squeeze page: you can use WordPress plugins and do some really fancy stuff since you have much more control when you own the domain.

There's a real good attention-grabbing plugin for WordPress called "WP Lead Gorilla."

It's not my product and this is not an affiliate link:
wpleadgorilla.com/live-demos/

That squeeze page is designed to be placed over visually stunning background images.

You may be ok with the squeeze page you've got now but the graphical ones really get your attention.

What you don't want is someone hitting the "back button" the moment they realize they are on "another squeeze page."

With WP Lead Gorilla (or other plugins that do the same thing) your squeeze page can stand out from the average ones.

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Matt Dog

I'll tell you honestly what I think.

It looks "ok", but especially since you are marketing to other marketers (who KNOW you want to make money off them and are consciously aware of that) you need to give them a reason to trust you since most of us have seen every trick in the book.

The problem is your squeeze page is a typical "see-it-everywhere" kind of squeeze page.

When Average Joe or Average Jill looks at that will they be impressed or are they gonna say "wow... another 'life changing report' that I have to sign up for...and I suspect it's gonna be a bunch of useless junk just like every other free report I've signed up for'"???

I'm not meaning to offend you only to help you.

I'm guessing "90secondsqueezepages.com" isn't your domain but you just have your squeeze page hosted there.

Have you thought of hosting it on your own site (or buying another site if you need to)?

There is a major benefit of having your own domain to host your squeeze page: you can use WordPress plugins and do some really fancy stuff since you have much more control when you own the domain.

There's a real good attention-grabbing plugin for WordPress called "WP Lead Gorilla."

It's not my product and this is not an affiliate link:
wpleadgorilla.com/live-demos/

That squeeze page is designed to be placed over visually stunning background images.

You may be ok with the squeeze page you've got now but the graphical ones really get your attention.

What you don't want is someone hitting the "back button" the moment they realize they are on "another squeeze page."

With WP Lead Gorilla (or other plugins that do the same thing) your squeeze page can stand out from the average ones.

I see thanks. Its on 90secondsqueeze page because that site has built in templates for you to fill in the blanks. Its free so its obviously going to be limited in what it can do.

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ProfessionalMarketer

14 years ago

I will seriously suggest an image for your squeeze page!!

Maybe you can take a screenshot of your affiliate earning and place it at the middle or top of your squeeze page... It's not only gonna make your page look better but you will be able to increase your subscribers sign up!!

All the best

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cssbros

14 years ago

3 Pointers:

Graphics
Colors
Typography

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mootonandy 14 years ago

Can you please tell me what you think of my new one? Thanks a lot.

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- magiclouie 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by mootonandy
  
  Can you please tell me what you think of my new one? Thanks a lot.
  
  Affiliate Marketing Simplified
  
  This is much better, however if you could add a report cover, that would be awesome.
  
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  mootonandy 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by magiclouie
  
  This is much better, however if you could add a report cover, that would be awesome.
  
  Take a look now, tell me what u think plz.
  
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- mootonandy 14 years ago
  
  Originally Posted by mootonandy
  
  Can you please tell me what you think of my new one? Thanks a lot.
  
  Affiliate Marketing Simplified
  
  This is the new one.
  
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magiclouie

14 years ago

Hi mate,

In my own opinion, you don't need to italicize your bullet point items.

Also, if you could change the font color of your headline into red, I think that would help.

In your optin form, you may want to add a report cover.

Cheers,
Louie Tugas

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Rockt

14 years ago

I can't see the signup form. I can see the top of a Facebook form (I've just blacked my name out) but I can't scroll down.

Firefox 15.0.1 on a Mac.

My post count is too low to share a link, but put evernote dot com before this url below to see my screenshot.

shard/s40/sh/21f8a61c-4b18-40e3-afac-42fb19f2e5ad/a71f612b86e84eee1af007f6abdb3d41/res/2ff4c575-d6e3-411e-bd71-aa660a81c38e/skitch.png

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shifat

14 years ago

I don't like the color of the title on your eBook.

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rising_sun

Banned 14 years ago

Header font must be attractive ,
I dislike it ,but every thing depend on your choice.

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by mootonandy

If theres anything wrong with it or it sucks just tell me plz:

Affiliate Marketing Simplified

This is the old one.

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denysapu

14 years ago

Originally Posted by mootonandy

If theres anything wrong with it or it sucks just tell me plz:

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The product cover was ugly for me.
The "sign up" bubtton was looks slightly submerged in my browser (I use Google chrome)
I would be more interested to enter my email if there is few evidence that there are some people who succeed with it.

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by denysapu

The product cover was ugly for me.
The "sign up" bubtton was looks slightly submerged in my browser (I use Google chrome)
I would be more interested to enter my email if there is few evidence that there are some people who succeed with it.

Thats the old one you are looking at.

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markthedoc

14 years ago

I'd consider getting a designer to design the cover for your ebook. It looks a bit unprofessional at the moment, it looks like it's been produced by an amateur and wouldn't make me want to read it. There are plenty of great, inexpensive designers available to hire on this forum.

I also agree with hosting your site on your own domain. It'll come across as much more professional.

Hope that helps.

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TheFox

14 years ago

Not bad, but I'd ditch the italics. It's a bit too much, IMO.

Also, can you redesign the cover page of the book you're promoting? Neon pink on blue? Ick.

I would add a bit more padding to the whole box or drop the title down a bit so it's not so far away from the rest of the text.

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bhmseoservices

14 years ago

The website is a little boring and here's what I would do.
Add a cool slider,
Customer testimonials,
and more call to actions.
Bring also more color into it.

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mootonandy 14 years ago

Everyone is looking at the old one. Ill go back and change it to avoid this.
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Bryan Zazz

14 years ago

actually it depends what this page is for.
As a squeeze page, this may be good.
As Kern often says: ugly sells (no offense)
My main problem was: I could not see the fields for email and name,
so took me a while to figure it out ... see, I am too lazy to scroll a page
I can't figure out in the first 3 sec., easier to press the Close button.
So put your email fields "above the fold" !!! - VERY IMPORTANT.
If you don't need to know user names, don't ask for Names, just emails,
some won't give you anything because they don't want to give you their name,
or "any" name (fake)

Some suggests the squeezer with cute/sexy backgrounds ... maybe!
2 problems I see with that:
1- that image takes longer time to load
2- goal of squeeze page is simple: get viewer email - PERIOD
Showing viewer unrelated images (nice chick on the beach) is distracting
viewer and site from this goal.

Example:
background image: sexy blonde on beach
Form text: "30 Days To $15K"
Conclusion: I'm confused!
... so toss the "30 Days To $15K" nonsense, I just want the chick now!!
see, good idea, but not so good ...

and I even tend to believe that your uglier (but simpler and less confusing)
page will outperform the blonde-on-the-beach squeezer

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Originally Posted by Bryan Zazz

actually it depends what this page is for.
As a squeeze page, this may be good.
As Kern often says: ugly sells (no offense)
My main problem was: I could not see the fields for email and name,
so took me a while to figure it out ... see, I am too lazy to scroll a page
I can't figure out in the first 3 sec., easier to press the Close button.
So put your email fields "above the fold" !!! - VERY IMPORTANT.
If you don't need to know user names, don't ask for Names, just emails,
some won't give you anything because they don't want to give you their name,
or "any" name (fake)

Some suggests the squeezer with cute/sexy backgrounds ... maybe!
2 problems I see with that:
1- that image takes longer time to load
2- goal of squeeze page is simple: get viewer email - PERIOD
Showing viewer unrelated images (nice chick on the beach) is distracting
viewer and site from this goal.

Example:
background image: sexy blonde on beach
Form text: "30 Days To $15K"
Conclusion: I'm confused!
... so toss the "30 Days To $15K" nonsense, I just want the chick now!!
see, good idea, but not so good ...

and I even tend to believe that your uglier (but simpler and less confusing)
page will outperform the blonde-on-the-beach squeezer

Thanks a lot for that. I've updated it, what do you think now please?

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kazim

14 years ago

New one is much better than old one.
it's really a good job.

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mootonandy

14 years ago

Please tell me which one you think is the best

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joshua123

13 years ago

2nd one looks best but maybe add some bullet points about the main benefits or a video of you talking about your product for more credibility!

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John DeNiro

13 years ago

I think the Affiliate Marketing Simplified page looks the best because it's "clean".

The only thing I don't like is the eBook graphic...no offense, but it does not look professional made.

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