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Appreciate Some Feedback

by joolkano
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  • WEB DESIGN
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I created these two sites and wrote the copy. The first is a site designed to generate leads for a client of mine. http://eliminatebusinessdebts.com

The second is a site for a new niche that I'm targeting, businesses that are for sale by owner. Main | AttractBusinessBuyers.com

I would appreciate any feedback. Thanks.

Jon
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  • Profile picture of the author TheContentAuthority
    Joolkano,
    I would break up some of the content that you have on the home pages and organize it on other pages. Having large blocks of copy on pages causes users anxiety and they tend to skim through it or skip it all together. Use short lines that are broken up by images.

    For your business website building page, I assume you want people to click the button at the bottom of the page. This button and the value proposition should appear above the page fold. You have far too much content on the home page. Bring your action up front and center.

    I highly recommend reading these books on website usability,

    Don't Make Me Think: A Common Sense Approach to...Don't Make Me Think: A Common Sense Approach to...
    Conversion Optimization: The Art and Science of...Conversion Optimization: The Art and Science of...
    Good luck!

    Shawn
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  • Profile picture of the author vikassharma3000
    Feedback for eliminatebusinessdebts.com

    1 Very poor logo.
    2 Background is looking good.
    3 Your video is not that effective.
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  • Profile picture of the author mikedex
    Very simple design. Seems like a blog.
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  • Profile picture of the author florinhangu
    Hey there.
    Both sites has same design. simple, white and black here in there.. hmm, default theme, nothing special on it.
    Id say is way to much information in one single page, but maybe people will read it. Anyway, people like me wont read it.
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