Please Review My Landing Page's Pic

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Hello friends,I'm going to create a landing page to capture emails and give information about freebie industry and making money online opportunities to users. and this is my first design experience. I will use the following picture in the page to draw users attention. please give me your valuable suggestions and feedback to help me make it better.
Thank you very much.
http://i60.tinypic.com/1y8s5e.jpg
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  • Profile picture of the author Xezor Markv
    Did you make this picture? It looks really good, clean and straight to the point!
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    • Profile picture of the author tondar85
      Originally Posted by Xezor Markv View Post

      Did you make this picture? It looks really good, clean and straight to the point!
      Yes i made it. I thought it is not as cool as i expected but your comment made me motivated. Thank you very much for your kind words.
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  • Profile picture of the author Xezor Markv
    Show us the link of the page after you attached this image to it, I would like to see it . good job!
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    • Profile picture of the author tondar85
      Originally Posted by Xezor Markv View Post

      Show us the link of the page after you attached this image to it, I would like to see it . good job!
      Surely I will post the page address.
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  • Profile picture of the author nickrap13
    Its clean and nice.
    It show the visitors, what you offer from the very first moment.
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    • Profile picture of the author tondar85
      Originally Posted by nickrap13 View Post

      Its clean and nice.
      It show the visitors, what you offer from the very first moment.
      Thank you very much for taking time and writing your comment.
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  • Profile picture of the author Entrecon
    A few questions/comments.

    I would drop the word YOUR and make the top Line be FREE GUIDE. I would also change the middle to read "To Easily Earn". On the last line you have "Free Product". Can they only earn one product or can they earn many? If it is just one, I would make the middle read "To Easily Earn Your". If they can get more than one, make sure you change PRODUCT to PRODUCTS.

    The last comment is on the images you used. You say they can earn a "product". I don't consider cash to be a product. The image seems out of place based on the text on image.

    Granted, some of my comments might change when I see it in context with the whole sales page, but as a stand alone, I think the text can be stronger. Also, by making it shorter, you can use the name of the book in ad copy easier.
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    • Profile picture of the author tondar85
      Originally Posted by Entrecon View Post

      A few questions/comments.

      I would drop the word YOUR and make the top Line be FREE GUIDE. I would also change the middle to read "To Easily Earn". On the last line you have "Free Product". Can they only earn one product or can they earn many? If it is just one, I would make the middle read "To Easily Earn Your". If they can get more than one, make sure you change PRODUCT to PRODUCTS.

      The last comment is on the images you used. You say they can earn a "product". I don't consider cash to be a product. The image seems out of place based on the text on image.

      Granted, some of my comments might change when I see it in context with the whole sales page, but as a stand alone, I think the text can be stronger. Also, by making it shorter, you can use the name of the book in ad copy easier.
      Thank you very much for your suggestions.I will make the text shorter.well, I describe in the guide that subscribers can get both free products and gifts such as iPhone,iPad,etc or earn cash instead.(which many prefer cash i think). so i wanted to have a design that implies they can receive free gifts or earn cash. That's why i added the cash pics.You are right cash is not a product but how should i tell the visitors with my pics that they can make money OR earn gifts ? Do you have any suggestions for this?
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  • Profile picture of the author thechasetoriches
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    I think it looks good. Very clean. Definitely Grabs Attention.
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  • Profile picture of the author Luke Boobyer
    I would consider changing the font. It looks like you are trying to go for quite a professional look, but on my opinion it looks a little dated and too much like one of those get rich quick websites/guides.
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