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Critique my first squeeze page for offline businesses

by non
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It's in my signature.

I still don't know if the video is good or bad so what do people think?

I haven't sent any traffic but I'll probably try and send PPC (facebook, bing and adwords) I think.

Thanks

Would you recommend timer with the use of scarcity samurai.

i know that split testing is the best thing to do but first i'm just asking your opinions first.
#businesses #critique #offline #page #squeeze
  • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
    Non,

    It doesn't come up... getting a 404 error.
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    • Profile picture of the author non
      Originally Posted by shawnlebrun View Post

      Non,

      It doesn't come up... getting a 404 error.
      sorry about that it works now.
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  • Profile picture of the author shawnlebrun
    Non,

    Yep, works that time.

    Non, since the headline of your page will account for over 90% of the success or failure of your squeeze... you'll want to get more specific.

    Because right now, it still doesn't really explain EXACTLY what they will get.

    "FREE Video Course Reveals How to Get Low Cost, High Value Leads for your business"

    I like the intro...

    "FREE Video Course Reveals

    But after that, hone in and be more specific... along the lines of....

    "FREE Video Course Reveals How You Can Get 6,780 Leads from Facebook, in Less than 48 Hours, for Just Pennies Each"

    or...

    "FREE Video Course Reveals How I Turned $250 into $25,000 in Just 3 Weeks by Getting 4,890 Leads from Facebook"

    Now, those are just examples right off the top of my head, winging it, but I just wanted to show you what I meant by being more specific.

    Because in your prospects' mind, they have a specific idea of what they're looking for, well, at least if they're a valid prospect. so try to match that up with what they're looking to get.

    being too vague and general will just pass right by because it doesn't speak to their needs.
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    • Profile picture of the author ewenmack
      Non, skip re-inventing the wheel
      and use templates over at LeadPages.net.

      They have the highest converting pages right now.

      Plus you'll see the offers being made to get them.

      Part of the lead capture success is to have them on your Facebook page.
      People seem to feel more comfortable in familiar surroundings.

      Best,
      Ewen
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      • Profile picture of the author non
        Originally Posted by ewenmack View Post

        Non, skip re-inventing the wheel
        and use templates over at LeadPages.net.

        They have the highest converting pages right now.

        Plus you'll see the offers being made to get them.

        Part of the lead capture success is to have them on your Facebook page.
        People seem to feel more comfortable in familiar surroundings.

        Best,
        Ewen
        do you mean facebook ad -> facebook landing page
        instead of facebook ad -> optin on my website?

        atm i'm using PT instant.
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    • Profile picture of the author non
      Originally Posted by shawnlebrun View Post

      Non,

      Yep, works that time.

      Non, since the headline of your page will account for over 90% of the success or failure of your squeeze... you'll want to get more specific.

      Because right now, it still doesn't really explain EXACTLY what they will get.

      "FREE Video Course Reveals How to Get Low Cost, High Value Leads for your business"

      I like the intro...

      "FREE Video Course Reveals

      But after that, hone in and be more specific... along the lines of....

      "FREE Video Course Reveals How You Can Get 6,780 Leads from Facebook, in Less than 48 Hours, for Just Pennies Each"

      or...

      "FREE Video Course Reveals How I Turned $250 into $25,000 in Just 3 Weeks by Getting 4,890 Leads from Facebook"

      Now, those are just examples right off the top of my head, winging it, but I just wanted to show you what I meant by being more specific.

      Because in your prospects' mind, they have a specific idea of what they're looking for, well, at least if they're a valid prospect. so try to match that up with what they're looking to get.

      being too vague and general will just pass right by because it doesn't speak to their needs.
      thanks for that.

      What do you think of the video should i keep it and do you think that i should use one of those big background image leading pages instead (the ones with like a landscape picture of the sky etc)?
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  • Profile picture of the author KevinW
    I like the look of the page. It's nice and clean but I don't think the video works well with the page. The video should tell me what I'm getting after I optin and then close with a call to action to your optin form.

    I would start off with an autoplay 30 second video that grabs attention upon arrival, highlights your offer, and then tells the visitor to optin to get it.
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