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I've gone through the guidelines before drafting this short copy and this is what I came up with. Your opinions would be appreciated to see if I am on the right lines and how best to improve. Thanking you in advance.
Discover the art of love from nature’s very own Mata Hari
At Vigor flowers we don’t just sell flowers. We produce:
Experiences
Feelings
Emotions
Life itself
As a living, breathing entity, the flower knows a thing or two about the art of love.
An arch seducer, the flower is nature’s very own Mata Hari whose sole purpose is to procreate.
She may not talk our language but she is not stupid. She knows that in order to receive she must first give.
Through her eye-dazzling beauty, sweet fragrance and delicious nectar she seduces the passing mark who is powerless against her charms and between the two the act of love is sealed and the continuation of life guaranteed.
Whatever your occasion, be it romantic, corporate, sympathy or just to treat yourself, bring your special moment to life with Vigor flowers.
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