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9 years ago

F- when viewing from a mobile device. All I see is an image and I can click an arrow looking thing that shows me an image with a little text. I'm assuming that's a buy button on there.

Edit: when I click the arrow, I can scroll down but there is a TON of empty white space and it has no flow. Just a bunch of images. The imaged look pretty well designed though.

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KingDesigner 9 years ago

THANKS BRO

it's just an essai, i hope you can see that from your Screen
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Gambino

9 years ago

Originally Posted by Gambino

F- when viewing from a mobile device. All I see is an image and I can click an arrow looking thing that shows me an image with a little text. I'm assuming that's a buy button on there.

Edit: when I click the arrow, I can scroll down but there is a TON of empty white space and it has no flow. Just a bunch of images. The imaged look pretty well designed though.

Okay, I looked at it on the tablet and it looks a lot better on here.

I agree with KK075, tons of typos.. in addition to seemingly randon capitalization and color schemes. I also think there are a lot of unneccessary images that just take up space without providing any value to visitors or their experience. I would reduce it and make it short and sweet.

Overall, I'd give it a C.

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kk075

9 years ago

I think you're putting all kinds of drama and suspense into something as simple as cover art...I couldn't make it a 3rd of the way down the page before giving up. I even went back a 2nd time and tried again but it's just too much to process...I still don't know what your product is.

If you have something that's a legitimate value, then you don't need long form sales copy to push it like mad. You're showing them right off the bat that you're an internet marketer trying to work an angle and that destroys trust.

You also have tons of typos as well. I hope that helps.

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KingDesigner

9 years ago

KK075 GAMBINO Thanks for your simple golden words

yeah that's help, i will see what i can do

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KingDesigner

9 years ago

Thanks for your time Bro

i edited the page as i can lol

here's the new version ecover master

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Chris Lee

9 years ago

I think you need more copy and explain exactly what it is you're selling.

I didn't know until I scrolled all the way down that this wasn't a service.

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cherrytom

9 years ago

I just had a look on my desktop PC, and your site is really awesome! The amount of detail you'e got on there is amazing, and I love all the clear images. I didn't try to call it up on my smart phone, simply because I never use it for surfing the 'Net. Sincerely --- well done!
Keep smiling!

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Rory Singh

9 years ago

Make sure that your visitor gets an idea of what this is quickly (in a few seconds). Also make sure that you have a strong 'call to action'. What do you want each 'targeted' visitor to do. Your graphics are nice but if people don't understand quickly what's in this [for them], they will navigate out of your site fast and furiously.

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Path Theory

9 years ago

There's a few grammatical errors. Extra word thrown in, plural words that shouldn't be, ect.

I'd shorten it by at least half. You don't need to display all 100 images they'll be receiving. Bring the sales pitch closer to the top.

Shoot me a pm if you want me to list the sentence structures that I feel are incorrect.

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iClickGraphics 9 years ago

WOW!

This guy are using my envato studio header.

https://studio.envato.com/users/nathanieldasco

You should design your own logo.

Since my logo and brand were stolen not sure if you are legit buyer of my kindle templates
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astral walker

9 years ago

Originally Posted by KingDesigner

HI WARRIORS

I NEED YOUR OPINION FOR MY SALES PAGE

ecover master

THANKS WARRIORS

1. Your website is not responsive. Fix that if you don't want to lose mobile visitors. Google will also penalize your site if don't fix it right away

2. A sales page with a border looks great and it's easy to grab attention

3. The header logo or design is not professional.

4. The colors that you have used is dull. Use a good color combination

If you are serious, hire a graphic designer and get it designed in a professional manner.

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edlange

9 years ago

Great Sales Page....but with the need for Photoshop...will become pricey!

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Sujinb14

9 years ago

your salepage is completely Awesome now....

your hard work done on this salepage shows itself.

Good Job!

keep putting interesting and new things on it.

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iClickGraphics 9 years ago

You should design your own brand KingDesigner

Don't use my header that you took from my Envato service here
https://studio.envato.com/users/nathanieldasco

This is infringement!
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Phil Wilkinson

9 years ago

First of all, iClickGraphics seems to have a point...that your header logo is HIS.

Secondly, your site looks pretty good. I had no problem seeing what it's about, and what you're offering.
However, when I scroll to the bottom, there are three blue arrows pointing at nothing. There is no buy button, or anything else, as far as I can see from my desktop.
So if I wanted to buy it, how could I?

By the way, you should un-link the images, so when you pass your cursor over them, it doesn't show the link to your media library.

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