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Please Critique New Sales Page! Will Return Favor!

by Allurre
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Hey guys,

Just launched my site at verbalplayboy.com recently.

I would love to get some honest criticisms and comments on
the copy writing and your general response to it.

What strengths / weaknesses do you see?

In return, I'll also be more than happy to share my opinion
for your site. Just drop your link herein.

Respect,

Andrew
#critique #favor #page #return #sales
  • Profile picture of the author mogulmedia
    Dude, first impressions are good. Nice colors, graphics. The main image or flash player under the title didn't load for me, don't know if that's my browser or not.

    Don't have time to read it now sorry but I would say maybe format the layout where you have your testimonials, they look a bit funny stuck over on the right hand side.

    Other than that top job, hope you sell loads!
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    • Profile picture of the author Allurre
      Thank you for your time bro. Noted your input.

      The flash player is suppose to be my Youtube Vid giving introduction to the product.
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  • Profile picture of the author jbode
    Hey man, it's pretty good

    here's a few things I know could bump your conversions...

    instead of using rapidly in your headline give them an actual time, it seems more real and believable to people (instant gratification is always a good opening headline)

    I'd also trim down some of the copy after you explain your offer and maybe more clearly define why it's a good deal for them there

    hope this helps
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