My New Video

Hi Ron....

In the beginning when you're talking directly to your viewers.....it sounds like you're talking to a bunch of children. Right after that when "My Background" comes on the screen, you sound more like you're having a normal conversation and your tone if much better. I found the same thing throughout the video. Whenever you appear on the screen and talk directly to your viewers, it sounds like you should be saying "Now listen to me boys and girls", but when only your voice is heard and there are words on the screen, you sound fine.

Also...you are just adorable. You have a very trustworthy face and look a little like Santa. I would buy from you.

The information itself was very good and I could see how it could benefit someone who wanted to learn about making money from home.

Good luck Ron!!

Thank you JoAnne for you feedback.

I agree with JoAnne. You need more energy and movement when talking
directly to the viewers. Also, reading from the screen (I'm sometimes
guilty) is a poor use of PPT. You should just use your main points as an
illustration rather than use the screen to 'show your script'.

So again, the screen should be supportive of what you are saying, not
a copy of what you are saying.

Keep at it ... some people don't even start!

-Ray L.,

Hi Ron! Checked out your stuff. I lke the video but I would consider having more text on your site describing your service and a shorter video. You've only got a few seconds before people commit to stay or leave your site--most will not invest in 5-6 minutes of video. I'd cut it down to just a minute or two-max.

Hit them hard with the benefits in your text. That way, someone could scroll through the text quickly and once they deicde if they like the concept they could learn more from the video. I'd also move the video down the page and hit them with benefits using text first.

I'm not being critical--I want you to make a million--just my two cents worth. Good luck buddy!

I recommend that you cut your intro and instead start with the powerpoint jumping right in at the point where you say "I started..."

I also recommend cutting all the talking head shots. You sound much more natural in the voice only part of the presentation.

Additionally if you are going to do more talking head shots I recommend getting a camera with a mic input and using a wireless lavalier microphone.

I cannot comment on the content itself as I only briefly skimmed the video to observe the look and feel of the sounds. But I definitely felt the voice over content was more natural and believable sounding than the talking head parts.

If you want to use talking head content you need to practice your presentation and speaking skills so that you can sound more natural.

You have a very nice calming voice in the voice over parts... I recommend practicing presenting to the point that you are either not reading the script/outline or that you are reading it in a way that it sounds like you are just speaking naturally to the visitor.

See, Ron. This is where I see a lot of people not reaching their maximum levels in internet marketing.

Please don't take this the wrong way, but if you do a video please make sure you're a professional at doing one. There are those of us in the industry that have been doing voice over projects as well as on camera projects to feed out families. Just because the technology exists, doesn't mean you should necessarily do the video. The music is great and then it opens with you. Again no offense. I don't even know you, but you have got to hold a visitor and the only way to do that is to be a little more professional.

The problem is using the tools to make money! You should hire the professionals to do that for you. You can never be all things to all people. Although we all like to think we are. Hey, I used to have a cheesy website and I thought it "rocked". Well, I finally got enough feedback from enough professionals to figure out that I wasn't a good web designer. So what did I do? I hired professionals right here on the warrior forum to re do my site, and to upgrade my blog. and guess what? I will continue to tweak and re tweak until I project the best possible image I can to my niche with the help of the third part professionals that I use.

Please take this as objective criticism and not as an attack. I think you'll be much better served by using those on this forum that can help elevate your dreams, goals and desires. Don't try and re invent the wheel.

scott