RedWaterDub

Hi Warriors,

I know my niche is not "hot" but I think my sales page maybe is not so great...

For those of you experienced with being successful with your sales pages, your advice would be gold and I will really appreciate it.?

WARRIORS - Could I please get your opinions on how I could improve it?

The Big Book of Home Remedies - Ebook

Thanks a lot.

savidge4

I don't think there is a rule.. come to think of it, I am not sure I have ever seen this before, so maybe there has never been a need for the rule... I just don't think a squeeze page should be in a blog post.

The general idea is with a call to action ( the button that a user presses that says YES I want to pay you money" that it stand out from the page and attract the eye. to be honest with your amazing rainbow bright display of text.. I scrolled right on past it.

The videos are far from believable. the text is almost to the point of annoying

There really is such a thing as to much of a good thing, and you flat out killed testimonials.

why not kinda go the direction that Scientology did? you remember.. How to heal a ear infection: page 34 How to sooth a skin rash: page 109.

Maybe give a partial list of the ingredients used in your remedies...

Focus more on showing the benefits of the book, and the life style it offers, and focus less on what you think marketing is.

RedWaterDub

Okay, thanks for that... I just ditched the reviews to start with..

btw... I actually paid somebody from the warrior forum to write that sales page for me... guess that was a waste of money huh...

I have changed it quite a bit now...

mathan

Use light color instead of dark. and redesign the page completely. It helps to improve to read.

savidge4

Im going to be honest once again, and I have to say it, but its bad... this paragraph for example:

"By clicking the buy now button below, You will also be getting full access to our private members area, which has a huge ebook collection. Along with the The Big Book of Home Remedies ebook, you will also receive a unique password which you can use to enter our special members area. Once inside the members area you can download as many as these ebooks as you like, absolutely free. There are over 230 different home remedies and natural health ebooks in our collection and we’re adding to that all the time. To see some of them, click here. These ebooks are valued between $7 dollars for the smaller ones up to $37 for the arger ones that have at least 100 pages. You do the math… I think you can see just what a generous offer this actually is.Buying The Big Book of Home Remedies is the only way to get this access, so go ahead and buy my ebook, get your password and all those additional ebooks can be yours too! "

Should read something like:
As an added bonus you will gain access to our special members area. Once inside you will find an additional 230+ home remedies and natural health books to choose from for FREE. Buying "The Big Book of Home Remedies" is the only way to gain access to this vast library of health and home remedies treasure trove. Make a commitment to your health and get the book today.

Short, condensed and to the point. Showing value in the purchase, and reaching out and reinforcing the idea of the page to begin with... buy the book.

A general rule of thumb for a sales page, don't link away from it. You can list some of the titles if you like, but try not to link to another page that lists them. you are taking a potential customer OFF of your buying page. you work hard enough to get them there, you want to KEEP them there.

You NEED a headline. when the page loads you need to capture the interest of the potential buyer to continue in your sales process. something like:

Keith Peterson

Hi,

My two cents

1- It looks quite dark, so not so soft on the eyes, Kindly change the color so that it does not look harsh.
2- Too much of text, I lost the connect just after the 1st paragraph. Need to have a wiser approach.
3- It downloads so late. I saw that image after a minute. My net speed is around 8 mbps at the moment. So, you need to optimize the page load also.
4- Improper formatting. Trust me, if I were a prospect, it would have become a mission to get directed and find the real destination.

It needs a practical approach. You wasted money as you hired a not-interested display of work. If you want, I can assist as I have been marketing various products and services on the web. Landing page has been a pivotal approach for garnering leads.


Best,

RedWaterDub

Thanks for the constructive criticism and pointers, much appreciated. I have implemented your suggestions and will be trying to alter some of the other text as well..

RedWaterDub

Hi, thanks for your suggestion... can you please expand on what you mean in point 4? I dont quite understand it.