Need a review of my landing page

by DR0832
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I am looking for somebody with experience to review my landing page click here

It's a work in progress...
#landing #page #review
  • Profile picture of the author rdimabuyu
    I would consider more powerful wordings, or more direct ones. No more extras.


    This Simple System Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight!

    "Turns Penny Stocks Into Enormous Profits Overnight!"


    To Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now!

    "Beat The Learning Curve And Start Profiting, Download Our Free Trading E-book Right Now!"


    More direct, more engaging, and it's like commanding them to get started.

    Just saying..
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  • Profile picture of the author DR0832
    Thanks. Anymore comments?
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  • Profile picture of the author The Cypher
    It's god awful.

    Not to sound mean, but no one cares about your product. They never do. They care about their result.

    My simple system. Your strategies. There's not enough focus on the end result. No curiosity on your page.

    You are blatantly selling something. No one likes to be sold. Unless you're doing a good amount of preselling before they hit this page ... It looks like the other 10,000s trading landin pages out there.

    If you'd like I can point out some fantastic landers in this niche that is compelling and builds tons of curiosity
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  • Profile picture of the author DR0832
    Yes point them out please. My old sales page sold about $100k of my product but I need help for sure.
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  • Profile picture of the author exoro
    Sounds like a traditional internet scam to me. "SIMPLE trading system turns penny stocks into ENORMOUS profits OVERNIGHT". Please...

    If you're having a tough time pulling profits out of this product, how do you expect your customers to pull a profit?
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    • Profile picture of the author DR0832
      Did you read what I said extoro? I Sold $100k and that's just from my first product because I offer something very few people do: A real way to extract profits from the stock market. There is no problem with my product. There's literally 10k trading relating products out there that are complete scams, so your comment is not needed. I agree I would like to put a headline that doesn't sound like this but people ignore you. A headline like Want Real Results? Download This Free 60 page Trading E-book Right Now And Start Profiting.
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  • Profile picture of the author allegandro
    First of all, I'm not interested in your product at all, so when I came to your page, I expected nothing.
    They layout didn't make it better, but I decided to click on the video.

    And what happened, I liked the video, even if I know nothing about your product and I'm also not in the market the video was pretty good.

    Very simple and for those who are in to penny stocks, it will trigger them.

    So my advice, show the video, improve it when you can and that is it.

    Forget the rest, just the video and a call to action button.
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  • Profile picture of the author The Cypher
    Hey DR0832,

    Sorry for the late reply. Got tremendously busy in the past few days. So I wanted to add a lot of ideas to this post for you and I'll also take screenshots of examples and PM you them by the end of the day.

    As a disclaimer, I'm not in the financial market myself, but I have studied Agora extensively. When they launch a product or a newsletter and it doesn't hit over $1M in its first week, its a failure. So that's kind of how I'm approaching this.

    What your page seems like, because of the headline, is more of a make money quick scheme than legitimate trading advice. If you can tap into what your prospects are into and move away from the scheme and closer to trading advice, you'll double your reach and profits easily.

    I know you have a good amount of sales already, and without knowledge of your product I can't really say what your ideal prospect is... But I'm guessing that the low-mid tier trader is more your speed.

    So look at your ideal prospect. Whether you realize this or not, a day trader or a serious financial investor is constantly checking and updating themselves on recent news. Especially in the, you guessed it, financial markets. Change your ad and your lead to look and feel like a news headline and I guarantee you that it will pull better, assuming you are marketing in the correct places.

    Agora had an ad a long time ago that read something similar to,

    How I infiltrated the Richest Circles of America and Stole Their Secrets.

    The headline to the VSL was something like,

    My Secret Double Life: How I infiltrated the Richest Circles in America

    See how this is news related? See how it generates curiosity rather than focusing on a benefit?

    Why did he infiltrate the circle?
    What did he learn?
    What secrets?
    How did he do it?


    To come full circle if you go on Stansberry Research now, there is a banner add running towards the top, with Ron Paul talking about his predictions on America he made years ago. Once again. It's a news article nothing else.

    What you have in your market is an undeniable thrist for information. Any serious trader honestly scourges the internet and news as often as he can to get the first look or insider scoop. If you can tap into this information hungry your market has, you're golden.

    Another thing to note, is that you don't need to have aa typical 'lead magnet'. You don't need to offer them a eBook in exchange for their email. Daily Insider Secrets would be enough to get people to part with their email as long as the curiosity is there.


    To sum everything up. You're using a benefit driven headline that a lot of the market has seen before. Their sophistication has grown, and so must you. The ability to tap into their thirst for knowledge I believe is key to you continued success.
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    • Profile picture of the author BrandonKaws
      That was an awesome reply Cypher. You just upgraded my strategy with that gem.
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    • Profile picture of the author kursat
      Originally Posted by The Cypher View Post

      Hey DR0832,

      To sum everything up. You're using a benefit driven headline that a lot of the market has seen before. Their sophistication has grown, and so must you. The ability to tap into their thirst for knowledge I believe is key to you continued success.
      Great advice and nice tips...thank you. really enjoyed reading it.
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  • Profile picture of the author DR0832
    Thank you for taking the time to post. I agree with what you said cypher. The funny thing is Agora media and Stansberry Reasearch are stock promotion websites. They are essentially frauds that get paid to promote useless companies (aka pump and dumps) and useless trading products. None the less their advertising works because there are many suckers out there that buy into their bs,
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  • Profile picture of the author Platt
    It doesn't look that good if I'm honest.
    The title is too long, there's no information about what your company does, the letter types are not appealing to read ...
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  • Profile picture of the author Adam Yunker
    Hey DR0832,

    I know you already got a lot of advice on here so I'll keep mine short.. Frankly because there's not much I don't like about it!

    Anyways, I know you have a "Get Started" button, but I think what'll increase conversions is to already have the information that they need to provide already there in front of them (and try to require as little information as possible)

    So for instance just add a little "email address" bubble next to it so people can see all they need to do is enter their email address.

    I know it's a quick tip, but honestly I love it!

    I think it looks amazing.

    Hope this helped in a way

    Adam
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  • Could be make more direct and to the point.
    - Heading could be made more effective
    - Text can be minimize

    Especially with the designing perspective, It could be make waaaay better.
    - No text alignment
    - Sections are jumbled up
    - Scroll can be minimized or can be created with zero scroll

    What I like is the video, Short and comprehensive.

    Regards
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  • Profile picture of the author LydiaHuang
    Put the benefit on top! and tell them you are the solution to bring that to them. Do market the product. Market the solution! make people resonate with your wordings
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