beyside

So I just put together my first squeeze page. Any input on how to make it better would be great!

My e-book is still being made so I have not started advertising yet to see if it converts.

My thoughts are to promote it on facebook. Any recommendations on where I should start my ppc campaign?

savidge4

Woodworking happens to be a passion of mine. I would say the only line that grabbed me as in GRABBED me, was the list of 10 top selling items.

In regards to the rest of the page... I would loose the current headline. I would use "Turn your woodworking hobby into a $4,000 + monthly income" into your headline. bullet everything they will get for inserting their e-mail. 1) 3 detailed project plans 2) a resource for an additional 16,000 + plans and ideas 3) A list of the top 10 selling wood items.

turn your passion into cash. part time or full time you can make extra cash from your shop no matter how large or small.

I see from your e-mail that you actually start to get into the step by step process of how to make this work. This is a benefit as well.

My e-book guides you in the process step by step. not only providing a list of items to sell but a strategy to actually selling them. It works for me, it will work for you too. Enter your a-mail address below and get started today.

PS I would be more than happy to look at your e-book etc when you are done - since I signed up for your list and didn't get anything! LOL you owe me! hahaha

joelraitt

You got some good feedback already.

I'll add a few thoughts:

- agree your current 2 word headline isn't good, I live the idea of moving the other headline up as mentioned

- you scream 'get my free book instantly' at the very top....i suggest using that space for benefits

- maybe tease about the top 10 (they are not what you think?) or if there is something most people would think say it is NOT that

- maybe give away one of the top 10 as the image and put some text on it that says " #6/10 top selling wood items"

- make sure your CTA button is above the fold

- instead of limited offer, i like bonus:

cheers,
joel

Work smart, work hard, never give up. Learn with me here: http://www.joelraitt.com

beyside

Great input so far Thanks!

RyanLB

Design wise, I think it looks great. The copy is solid too, but obviously you would need to hash things out through testing. I like that you answer the objections with "No Expensive Tools Needed," but I would split test that image. Again you would have to test this but my guess is that the email input should be either duplicated at the top or moved to the top for visibility, just beneath the headline.

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Kherk Roldan

Very Simple squeeze page, yet stunning!

Yet your page is slow! I also suggest you to add a popup box, either welcome popup or exit popup to gain more subscribers

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beyside

Thanks again for all the input, Savidge4 I will definitely send you the e-book I owe you! I have taken the site down to implement changes from the feedback you guys gave

dawoodkhan97

A great effort on making an attractive squeeze page
but I have noticed that there is a white space at the
end of your page which should be removed.

hichamaziz

Can I view your squeeze page? Plz

beyside

New and hopefully improved using MOST of the feedback
better?

savidge4

I would reduce your headline to "Turn your woodworking hobby into $4000+ a month" for a number of reasons.. #1 being it would reduce the overall size of the headline to 2 lines of text. #2 by removing the $12,000 you are allowing their mind to say hey if I can make 4K why not 20K? #3 using a single number suggests that is what you are making. - you don't say I make between 4 and 12K a month, you would say I make 8K per month on average or something like that. Overall it takes it out of the realm of spammy

Not a big fan with the use of bold text. the bottom testimonial should be in all italic and no bold text.

In the bullet points you need to think "Benefit" and not "feature" "BONUS OFFER of 100 woodworking project plans for free" just "included are 100 woodworking project plans"

Bullet #3 "Effective marketing to get an endless amount of work free" might be better read if it is "Learn effective marketing methods to get an endless amounts of work"

I would test the 2 bodies of text "Start a woodworking business.." and "How would you like to create..." I just am not seeing how they are helping you at this point.

Keep in mind the bait that is getting them there to this page will already imply those ideas. so if that aspect is the preselling, you are only needing to develop and reinforce on those concepts, not repeat them

Hope that Helps! - it really does look a ton better!

beyside

Thanks Savidge4! Exactly the feedback I am looking for. You have a great eye! If this converts well I will almost feel like I owe you some of it I agree with your feedback 99% because when I put the headline to $4000+ it just seems to lose a bit of punch that I felt it had. I agree that realistic is better than smoke and mirrors but at the same time people expect exaggeration when they are being sold. If I say 4k they will think they are lucky if they make 2k. When I say 4-12 they know that 6-7 is realistic and that really is realistic.
Just updated page based on your feedback.

savidge4

At this point I would run with it and see how it works.

Let the facebook ad be the preselling portion of the process. "Ever thought of creating an income from your passion of woodworking?

best of luck! let me know how it goes