[goodmast3r]

Hi Guys,

Can you please review my landing page? Convert static / HTML website to wordpress for Increased traffic What do you think of it? I'm trying to make it better and better

[urbanleg]

Originally Posted by goodmast3r

Hi Guys,

Can you please review my landing page? Convert static / HTML website to wordpress for Increased traffic What do you think of it? I'm trying to make it better and better

Hi Goodmast

I would actually size up the font for your positive pointers, after the headline it all looks like a block post... Make it more marketable
Add some minimalist graphics

[Nino]

People don't want to read anymore... Try to build a story that explains your service with more graphics (consumers want to be entertained, so if you want to get their attention, that's what you need to do).

[davidg93]

Hire a graphic design freelancer, who makes the design for you. To me, it does not look attractive at all. Make sure you hire a graphic designer only. (Not one of those companies in there who offer webhosting, webdesign, SEO etc at the same time). Graphic designer only + $100 = awesome design you can code yourself.

[JakeM1]

Although your english is good, there are quite a few errors in what you've written. This could then put people off if they're worried about a language barrier, or don't like the idea of paying for a service which is done from another country.

As you've got all the text written out, it should be quite a simple job to get someone to rewrite it.

Have a look on one of the websites such as Elance or Freelancer for someone with good english skills to rewrite it - ideally someone American if you've priced it in dollars, as quite a few words are spelt differently between England and America: British and American terms - Oxford Dictionaries

[RichardF]

I think just changing the background to something lighter (white is probably best) in the main wrapper would do wonders. Otherwise it doesn't look too bad, though not really exciting either...

My main concern, like Jake above me, is your English. I struggled to even get past the first sentence. This is much more urgent to fix than your design IMO.

[ninothevirtualguy]

Originally Posted by urbanleg

Hi Goodmast

I would actually size up the font for your positive pointers, after the headline it all looks like a block post... Make it more marketable
Add some minimalist graphics

Hey goodmast3r,

I agree with the guys here. I think your landing page is great but you really need to be direct with what you are offering to your target market. I would suggest putting a short 1 to 2 min video that explains your product, why your market needs it, the benefits of getting your products as opposed to your competition as well as giving them special offers (if you have any).

After that, you would want to place that on the very top portion of your landing page so people would easily notice it. HOPE THIS HELPS MAN!

[50cali8er]

I think you talk too much about technical jargon and about yourself. Unfortunately nobody cares!

Everyone cares about themselves and their own problems.

First question when someone land is they ask: 'What can I do here and how it benefits me?"
You also don't have any Unique selling proposition.
You should also know that people don't read full text in internet anymore, they skim. Highlight more important pain points.

Follow some conversation tips and for example watch this video to get some idea: SXSW PanelPicker

I hope it helps.

[goodmast3r]

Thanks everyone. I'll update the words and add images

BTW, I'm driving traffic from Adwords. So people already want the service and I need to convince them to choose our service.

Do you think many people don't like the idea of paying for a service which is done from another country? If that is the case should I change my Adwords to mention we are from Asia?