Yet Another Rewrite - Whatdya Reckon?
The thing is, I know I have a brilliant product here, but it just aint selling!
The other day I just sat down, and started writing.
It was about 2 or 3 hours of constant work, just editing what I already had.
A little later I came back and did the same thing again.
I took a lot of the advice from the last time I asked for help here, and made heaps of changes.
I've reviewed, revised and rewritten the rewrite many times over, and although I think it's better, it is still clearly lacking.
I used lots of real testimonials for authority (needed especially because, as has been pointed out, I look pretty young in the videos used ((which I will rerecord when I get my camera back)) and focused a lot on building empathy with the subject.
Any suggestions, advice, first impressions and criticism that will help me improve this letter and my skill as a copywriter in general will be hugely appreciated.
The product is at www.hypnosis-training.com
Thank you for your help.
Cheers!
Nathan.
PS
Of course, if you want a free copy of the course in exchange for your help, just send me a PM.
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