New Dating Advice Squeeze Page

It needs a little working, starting with the title of the page. My tab shows 'untitled'... you might want to fix that.

The video quality could be better, it's kind of grainy, the voice is too low, I had to strain to hear you.

The video is also draggy... I get no excitement from it at all.

The copy looks ok, but it could use some 'oomph' also.

-Dani

Looks like a good start, but here are a few suggestions.

I'd Host your video somewhere else besides Youtube, the quality isn't all that good like Dani said.

Also the opt-in box isn't above the fold. Try to decrease the size of your red arrow or something, because if they have to scroll your opt-in rate is going to drop a little for sure.

Hey Zach!

This is one of the better pages I've seen here--and I review squeeze pages for people all the time.

This should do well for you--and I should know--I have tested over 1,400 squeeze pages on 100,000+ visitors and currently have several squeeze pages converting over 80%

To increase conversions I would test several variations:

First, I would test using the same video footage, but with a bolder promise in a headline and in the voice over. Something along the lines of "Learn my Magic 5-Minute Pick Up Technique" or whatever bold promise you can make. People are interested in having their lives changed, not in watching you. Talk about how watching these videos will change their lives in one specific, limited area.

Second, test a different background color. Black may be hurting your conversions.

Third, test adding a headline with a bold promise. In my tests in various niches video squeeze pages with headlines containing a bold promise out performed those without a headline.

Test using Google Optimizer:

http://www.Google.com/websiteoptimizer/

it's easy and will show you which variations have the best response.

I'd love to hear how your conversions go after testing.

Use a different background color (something like a light gray to almost white or blue)
Use Tahoma for your headline, and make the color of your headline a nice dark red.
Use better video (by better I mean the quality)
Use a different headline and call to action.
Use Blinking Arrows.

I have a couple if you'd like me to send em to you. Just PM me.

Hope this helps.

Best Regards,
Anthony

I don't like the squeeze page but what do I know - I am not a guy...

Now, as far as your sales page:

I don't see how you can sell from this video, frankly, and here is why:

Mistake # 1 - You are hot

Mistake # 2 - The girl you picked is NOT hot

Mistake # 3 - You are much hotter than the girl in the video

The truth is when you are hot, all the pick up lines go out of the window... And you are not selling to good looking guys; you are selling to ugly guys who want to meet hot women... correct me if I am wrong...

What I would change to make it sell:

1. Try hiring a butt ugly dude

2. Pick a super hot woman

3. Have the butt ugly dude you've hired meet the super hot woman

P.S. The girl in the video appears to be super shy and doesn't have any social skills whatsoever; she was all jittery talking to you because she is very shy and unexperienced with guys; this is why it took you soo long to get her number

Wow. The comments by activetrader are great. Not sure how butt-ugly the guy should be, though. I'd stick with somewhat attractive people in the videos because most of us think we're somewhat attractive.

If you don't change the headline as ewenmack suggested, then I'd at least change the first part from this:

Hidden Camera Video Reveals

to this:

Hidden Video Camera Reveals

or this:

Hidden Video Reveals

The first way made me stop reading for a sec because it didn't sound right. (Unless that's some NLP thing of which I'm not hip.)

This sentence:

Step inside to access amazing content demonstrated through hidden camera footage of students and instructors meeting women. You'll learn...

will benefit from a couple of dashes or a hyphen or a set of parentheses.

Copywriters say that you don't always have to follow the rules of grammar and that's true. In this case I think readability is enhanced by invoking a slight pause in the thought like this:

Step inside to access amazing content -- demonstrated through hidden camera footage -- of students and instructors meeting women. You'll learn...

I think this structure has the side effect of reemphasizing part of your USP (video footage from the hidden cameras).

Grammatically it's still incorrect but it works. I might still change the "to" to "and" ... Step inside and access amazing content -- sounds more direct and active.

The first bullet (there are no bullet icons but there should be) is:

A Video Example of my favorite step-by-step approach to meeting women. It's simple, to the point, and always gets a fun, flirtations conversation started

This doesn't jive with the set up "You'll learn ..." (because you can't learn a video example.) The word flirtations needs to change to flirtatious.

I might even move the verb "started" to the front of the last phrase and delete "gets":

A Video Example of my favorite step-by-step approach to meeting women. It's simple, to the point, and always starts fun, flirtatious conversations!

The next bullet can be tighter with a few simple tweaks:

·How to instantly and reliably tell if a woman is attracted to you, no matter who else is watching or listening in on the conversation

There's more, but, by now, you get the gist of my thoughts I'm sure.

I just noticed that in the last para you wrote Hidden-Camera Videos. Seeing that made me rethink the headline. If Hidden-Camera Videos is a key phrase, then you can just make "cameras" singular and "video" plural.

Hidden Camera Videos Reveal


- Matt Lashley

you're an affiliate for the product.... i know alex. good product.

i'd get rid of the squeeze and use it on the thank you page.... the video squeeze will have a lower optin %

optin > thank you page with video and a link underneath to the vendor site.

just split test 10-20 optin page variations till you find the winner, then split test 10 or so thank you page variations and you'll be set.

you'll need to throw some traffic at it to get data.

I completely overhauled the old squeeze page and am now looking for some new feedback

something else near the opt in to ensure trust!

Make the bullet points something more exciting.. color check marks or atleast make them bigger...

whatever you do, you must test it to get DATA.

the data will tell you what is working and what isn't.

the only way to do this is to test.

no way around this.

From: Alex Coulson
Sydney, Australia

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we do not have a llc tag in australia ?

in exchange for a measly email address with absolutely no strings attached
just for entering your email address....
camera videos is enter a valid email address below

lol.... hank, some people don't get it. :-)

This will make it easier... take every suggestion, every idea you have....

make a new page for each.

You might have 2, you might have 20. (right now I have 10 variations of a page I'm testing).

run it in website optimizer.

send traffic to it.

IT will tell you which page is the winner.

End of story.