13 {{ upvoteCount | shortNum }}
13 {{ upvoteCount | shortNum }}

Looking for feedback

by petergyorffy
12 replies
Hey,

I have a site focusing on primal health and paleo - Home page - Peter Györffy.
It's new, 2 month or so and has <20 posts.

I've written an ebook that I've broken down into an email course for people who optin. I'd like your feedback on the squeeze page. What do you think? What can be improved?

Go to Sign-up for the newsletter - Peter Györffy

So far, very few people have signed up. Any ideas for improvement and better conversion?

Thanks!
#feedback
  • Profile picture of the author brieunier
    I guess that showing the actual benefit they will instantly get because it is not that clear (and readable).

    Show them some picture of the PDFS they will get with great cover photo. What will they gain from reading it ? What do you offer that they will hardly find somewhere else for free ? Is it a guide with more than 20 pages ? etc.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10291646].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author Rob Harris
    That link says "no results found". Have you since changed it?
    Signature
    Free Video Course
    How To Sell Affiliate Products
    Find out how you can get instant traffic to an affiliate offer and be making sales within an hour!
    http://bit.ly/howtomakesalestoday
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10291680].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author petergyorffy
    I've updated the page. Any better?

    Here's the old design:
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10291831].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author henryw1981
    Have you tried a 2 step optin?
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10292524].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author trobo
    Make the headline stronger. What's the most compelling reason they should sign up for your course? There are a zillion free courses out there competing for their attention, how is yours different & more appealing than the others?

    After the headline, put maybe two or three bullet points explaining what they can expect in the course.

    I would also suggest getting rid of the background graphics, and maybe just have a white background with your headline, bullet points, opt-in button and nothing more. Generally, the simpler the squeeze page design, the less there is to distract the prospect from the action you want them to take.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10292611].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author petergyorffy
      Originally Posted by trobo View Post

      Make the headline stronger. What's the most compelling reason they should sign up for your course? There are a zillion free courses out there competing for their attention, how is yours different & more appealing than the others?

      After the headline, put maybe two or three bullet points explaining what they can expect in the course.

      I would also suggest getting rid of the background graphics, and maybe just have a white background with your headline, bullet points, opt-in button and nothing more. Generally, the simpler the squeeze page design, the less there is to distract the prospect from the action you want them to take.
      Thanks a lot! Made a few changes. If possible please have a look again!
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10293608].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author fulfilledlife
    Two things:

    1. The pages loaded very slow for me.
    2. Squeeze page doesn't tell them exactly what they will be getting and what are benefits. Imho needs a stronger copy.
    Signature

    Try not to become a man of success, but rather try to become a man of value - Albert Einstein

    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10292624].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author petergyorffy
      Originally Posted by fulfilledlife View Post

      Two things:

      1. The pages loaded very slow for me.
      2. Squeeze page doesn't tell them exactly what they will be getting and what are benefits. Imho needs a stronger copy.
      Thanks! Worth a lot!

      Removed the image. Might speed up the loading time.

      Please have a look again. I've changed the copy.
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10293607].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author shermancox
    when you subscribe you write "you have sucessfully subscribed" white on white...so I can't see it...I was waiting for a second to see it come up...


    2. your page is a little slow as someone said..

    3. the freebe or the confirmation page never came

    4. I think you need to cut down what you give....it is too much....

    Maybe take one thing and run with that...

    how about "My primal exercize routine"
    How I lost weight and supercharged my energy.


    take that one piece out...and sell the full course you got...



    or maybe "The Paleo-primal diet"

    and so on...

    You gotta sharpen your offer...


    Also create an image of your course....like an ebook cover or something...


    oops it came after a few minutes...
    Signature

    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10292680].message }}
    • Profile picture of the author petergyorffy
      Originally Posted by shermancox View Post

      when you subscribe you write "you have sucessfully subscribed" white on white...so I can't see it...I was waiting for a second to see it come up...


      2. your page is a little slow as someone said..

      3. the freebe or the confirmation page never came

      4. I think you need to cut down what you give....it is too much....

      Maybe take one thing and run with that...

      how about "My primal exercize routine"
      How I lost weight and supercharged my energy.


      take that one piece out...and sell the full course you got...



      or maybe "The Paleo-primal diet"

      and so on...

      You gotta sharpen your offer...


      Also create an image of your course....like an ebook cover or something...


      oops it came after a few minutes...
      Great feedback. And thanks for subscribing. Hope stay with me and I'd love feedback from you a long the way!

      The idea is to give the course away and then publish it as a Kindle book as well but then with bonus content.

      I just subscribed myself and I got the confirmation email and I saw all text etc. so it seems to be working fine.
      {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10293597].message }}
  • Profile picture of the author joelmandre
    1. The speed is also something I see.
    2. You need to add an "a". Sign up for a free e-mail course. It looks like a scam with typos.
    3. Make it clear you have no intention on selling someone's information. That's one of my biggest fears on these "give me your e-mail" campaigns.
    {{ DiscussionBoard.errors[10292742].message }}

Trending Topics