TonyAG

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I currently have a video squeeze page that isn't doing so well. My visitors stick around to watch the video but they aren't convinced enough to submit their information to receive my free product. The product itself is a step-by-step traffic generation guide for newbies. You can check it out yourself in my signature box, no opting in required.

The script needs to have a maximum of 250 words.

I'm on a very tight budget, but hopefully we can work something out.

Examples of previous jobs will be highly appreciated.

The current video can be viewed here.

Steve Wells

I would make a copy of that video, then edit the copy and condense it so that it's only about 30 seconds long........

Just a few suggestion... that may save you some money if you can edit videos?

If not, whenever I had another video made, I would change the voice, it's kinda over powering to me. I would for sure, not use the same voice.

Your squeeze page also has some font formatting issues....... which might be something to look into also?

Serif fonts are not good for headlines........ you can get away with it on subheaadlines. Your trying to produce a funnel effect that lures your readers eyes downward.

The font choices under the opt-in area are not the best either, they run together, no space, so a sans-serif font would work better I believe?

Again, these are just suggestions............ sorry thats about all I can do to help, it's free though......

TonyAG

I had a feeling the voice over wasn't helping. Not really sure if editing the video will help but I'll do a split-test. What parts do you think I should edit out if you don't mind me asking?

Also, I never noticed any text formatting issues. I checked the website using Firefox and Google Chrome and it seems to be working fine. What looks out of place on your end?

Daniela T

Hi TonyAG,
I've sent you an email with first impressions and some suggestions, please check it out.
Daniela