Please Review my squeeze page

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Hi All,
Can you please ask for your feedback/comments on my squeeze page and what you would improve on or change about the current design?. i am new to affiliate marketing so still learning to put things together properly.

Thanks

Matty

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  • Profile picture of the author lerozk
    I think it is quite good. The only thing, it doesn't fits my browser window, I have to scroll, it a little bit annoying. My screen resolution is 1366x768
    Also CTA button is too large, it really doesn't look like a button, make it smaller
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  • Profile picture of the author munstersg01
    I feel that the white arrow should be red.

    I also feel that the background picture was rather distracting; when the lady at the background is enlarge it does not give the sense that the lady in the picture is slim although there is a tape measure to suggest so.

    You did not include a privacy policy and disclaimer. You may also wish to include some "as seen on" icons such as tweeter, facebook, Youtube etc. This is to make your offer look "legit" and more desirable.

    You may also wish to emphasize on the "free".

    Also you may want to A/B split test your squeeze page

    Hope my suggestions are welcomed and useful

    Best of luck

    Danny
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    • Profile picture of the author peekay
      To be brutally honest,

      Your offer -
      "Discover The Secrets To LOSING A MINIMUM OF 10 POUNDS IN 30 - 60 DAYS!"

      will not cut it, trust me.
      - It is too general.
      - It sounds hypey
      - People have seen it before, been there, done that and got burnt.

      You have to seriously rethink
      - your specific target audience
      - your offer to that target audience (one which is more specific, believable, valuable and sounds convincing).

      Hope you take this positively.
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      • Profile picture of the author jamesfreddyc
        Originally Posted by peekay View Post

        To be brutally honest,

        Your offer -
        "Discover The Secrets To LOSING A MINIMUM OF 10 POUNDS IN 30 - 60 DAYS!"

        will not cut it, trust me.
        - It is too general.
        - It sounds hypey
        - People have seen it before, been there, done that and got burnt.

        You have to seriously rethink
        - your specific target audience
        - your offer to that target audience (one which is more specific, believable, valuable and sounds convincing).

        Hope you take this positively.
        Totally agree. This marketplace has a much higher level of sophistication now and has simply heard it all. Most know that what the OP is offering is no secret whatsoever.
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      • Profile picture of the author prbarton
        Peekay is right on. The message is to general. Have to have a unique "Hook". No problem with the graphics except the white arrow is hard to see.
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  • Profile picture of the author Benung
    I want to add that if possible you can put the cover of the book because people want to perceive things.
    You can also add some key notes whats inside your free report.

    Hope this helps.
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  • Profile picture of the author LuckyIMer
    I like how the design/website looks like, it is simple and with good combination of colors. You need to work on content and SEO.
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  • Profile picture of the author Ghoster
    Definitely make the button smaller. I like it overall, though.
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    • Profile picture of the author savidge4
      I would test the button... there is such thing as to small maybe not so much to large. the arrow I would go Blue to match your color scheme and would pull it off the background that you have ( it now gets a bit lost )

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  • Profile picture of the author coluden
    You got some good suggestions already. I agree that a smal ecover for your report/book would be helpful. Keep fine-tuning your main header until it SNAPS!

    Best,
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  • Profile picture of the author matty123
    thanks for the feedback guys
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  • Profile picture of the author matty123
    anymore feedback from anyone else?
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  • Profile picture of the author longseo
    Your design is quite simple, but good.
    One comment: I think you should choose another background. The current background makes viewers hard to see the sentences in the opt-in section.
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  • Profile picture of the author 723Media
    Some good suggestions so far.

    I would make the "For Women Only" line less important. Right now it stands out too much. I get what you're going for but it competes with the headline.

    As @peekay and @jamesfreddyc pointed out, the headline needs a different focus. I wouldn't go with the the secret discovery approach.Try some emotive headlines.

    "Do your favorite jeans not fit anymore?"

    Something like that makes it more personal. Asking a painful question can help in this niche.

    Follow up with something that lets them know that you as the writer have gone through the same thing. Then let them know that you are offering a free report to help them lose those 10lbs.

    For the button copy: "Get Instant Access Now" doesn't really convey that they are downloading a free report. It's usually used for memberships.

    I would test the button copy as something like "Email Me My Free Report". That way you tell the user exactly what they are getting and how they should expect to receive it.

    I would keep the button size but it's definitely something that you can test.

    Last, I would test removing the privacy notice. They are used with good intention but can also introduce hesitancy. For some people, the fact that you mention that you won't spam them or sell their information, makes them question why you need to say that in the first place. If you feel you have to have that disclaimer, I would put it elsewhere in the funnel.
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  • Profile picture of the author xojads22
    make the women in the body looks slim and fit well with you main content, add more color variation to your ad copy to make it easy for visitors to see. Just my point.
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    • Profile picture of the author matty123
      thanks all. made some amendments ,let me know what you think.
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