
"Everyone knows that" and "Everyone writes this way"
Me: There's a lot of fluff in the description, like the first sentence, which is feel-good but doesn't contain any information. The whole writeup didn't say anything about the kinds of families your house would be best for, like that the upstairs suite would be perfect for an au pair, in-laws or an older teenager wanting their own space. And the way it was organized - going room by room or area by area, instead of starting with the highlights.
She: All the realtors write this way.
Me: That doesn't make it good.
She (after a hesitation): True.
Me: There were some terms in the description that I didn't understand, like "chair rails."
She: Everyone looking at houses knows what that is.
Me: Are you sure? And people are going to buy a house or not because the dining room has chair rails? I don't think it really conveyed the big picture of the strengths of your house.
For this house, it all turned out to be moot, because the house sold the first day on the market to someone who (long story) didn't even see the description.
What about these two objections - how often do you hear them from clients?
1)"Everyone writes this way"
2)"Everyone knows that"
Your comments?
Marcia Yudkin
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