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Dear Copywarrior

I need a copy writer to re-write this sales letter:

==> Pick Up Women On The Dance Floor

I know have 5 pages of testimonial and an endorsement from one of the world largest pick up company.

Please send me an email to RyanDRH@gmail.com

Delivery: 4-5 days

All the best and to MORE Success!

Ryan
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  • Profile picture of the author Chris Ramsey
    Damn you Mark. You got to it before I did

    I'll just say "Listen to Mark."
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  • Profile picture of the author Nathan Alexander
    And is it me? Or wouldn't you say that the copywriter would then need time to properly write, research and do the thing - and that's after they become available.


    If it wasn't said.
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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    Also, that page doesn't need a "rewrite"....

    It needs to be scrapped... and whoever writes the thing will have to start from scratch.

    Expect 2 - 3 from start date for your copywriter to finish your project... and they probably won't be available ASAP (if they're any good).

    -Dan
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  • Profile picture of the author Jennie Heckel
    Dear Ryan,

    Your sales letter is a little over done, but if it sells all the more power to you.

    What seems to be the main problem?

    What do your conversion stats tell you?

    Needs seo work as the code has no seo tags...

    Code is very funky, it is xml I know, but the tags are missing, are you getting any organic search sales?

    My suggestion is a new template, clean it up and relaunch it, your photo needs to be by your name at the top, and remove the top banner and use a good template that is more in line with what you are selling.

    Regards,

    Jennie
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  • Profile picture of the author Daniel Scott
    Jennie,

    You should never... ever... EVER try an optimize a sales page for SEO.

    Anything that gets in the way of getting the sale is out... and you can't do any onpage SEO with a sales letter... at least not intentionally.

    It's hard enough to write a killer piece of persuasion without trying to stuff in keywords.

    -Dan
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    • Profile picture of the author Ken Strong
      Originally Posted by Daniel Scott View Post

      Jennie,

      You should never... ever... EVER try an optimize a sales page for SEO.

      Anything that gets in the way of getting the sale is out... and you can't do any onpage SEO with a sales letter... at least not intentionally.

      It's hard enough to write a killer piece of persuasion without trying to stuff in keywords.

      -Dan
      Daniel, good post and thanks for bringing this up, although in Jennie's defense it looks like she only mentioned SEO tags in the HTML, which wouldn't be visible on the sales page or require any changes in the text.
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  • Profile picture of the author SuperRyan
    Thank you for all great comments.
    The jobhas gone but I keep everybody contact for future projects!

    All the best and to MORE success my friends! :-)

    Super Ryan
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