by The Copy Nazi Banned
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Ernest Hemingway was once challenged to write a complete story in six words. He wrote - "For sale: baby shoes, never used."

I'm wondering if this could be applied to headlines.

Like - "For Sale: Marketers Brain, Never Used"

That's pretty tame. I'm sure you can do better.
#sharp #short
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    How about, "Dyslexic atheist says he’s never believed in Dog."
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  • Profile picture of the author RickDuris
    Originally Posted by Metronicity View Post

    Ernest Hemingway was once challenged to write a complete story in six words. He wrote - "For sale: baby shoes, never used."

    I'm wondering if this could be applied to headlines.

    Like - "For Sale: Marketers Brain, Never Used"

    That's pretty tame. I'm sure you can do better.
    I think that's the whole concept behind Twitter.
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    • Profile picture of the author mmzcreates
      Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

      I think that's the whole concept behind Twitter.
      I would agree Twitter is the same concept.
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      Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

      I think that's the whole concept behind Twitter.
      Close. But we're talking 6 words here. And the average length of an English word is 4.5 characters. So lets say you have an average number of 27 characters. Whereas Twitter allows up to 140 characters. Like I said - "short & sharp".
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      Originally Posted by RickDuris View Post

      I think that's the whole concept behind Twitter.
      Gotta include Adwords, as well. Close to the same number of characters as twitter. (105 vs 140)

      Headline - 25 characters
      Line 1 - 35 characters
      Line 2 - 35 characters
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      Originally Posted by DougBarger View Post

      Parachute for Sale: Only Used Once, (Never Opened)

      (Courtesy of warrior Matt Pickstone)
      Not bad - but 8 words if you include what's in brackets. But I like it. There's still a story there - as in, took the jump but scared him(her)self stupid so never did it again.
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    Edit: OK, I just went back and read the "assignment" again. Not headlines, stories. OK, so it's before 6am here and I missed it. Still was good for my soul. Want a six word story? Here it is:

    Foggy head; went back to bed.
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    Grow 10 inches in two days

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      Originally Posted by Rezbi View Post

      Grow 10 inches in two days

      I'm referring to flowers, or course.
      You almost sold me. I've always wanted bigger shoes - this is why I don't like hype
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      • Profile picture of the author Rezbi
        Originally Posted by DCromwell View Post

        You almost sold me. I've always wanted bigger shoes - this is why I don't like hype
        Hey, don't have a go at me, mate, bigger shoes shouldn't be a problem.

        Feet, on the other hand, would be if you don't already have them.
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    I just discovered there's a whole site devoted to this concept - Six Word Stories
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    • Profile picture of the author MontelloMarketing
      One Sentence - True stories, told in one sentence. is a site that allows people to tell entire stories in one sentence.

      Not exactly like short headline writing but...

      Very interesting if you're looking for ways to tell stories in sales letters in a concise way.

      Granted... much of what's posted there... sucks. And more than a few aren't one sentence stories, rather five or six sentence stories thrown into one long run on sentence.

      But here are a few neat little packages I found...

      "After surfing dozens of porn sites and downloading thousands of songs illegally, I finally got a virus on my laptop from a website containing quotes from the Bible." (Even comes with an unspoken moral to the story.)

      "While my dad told us not to throw any more rocks in the creek, I launched my last big one over my brother's head as he stood up." (Leaves the big third act to your imagination, but still...)

      "The hardest thing was driving to the funeral alone." (Definitely a whole story in that)
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      • Profile picture of the author The Copy Nazi
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        Originally Posted by MontelloMarketing View Post

        One Sentence - True stories, told in one sentence. is a site that allows people to tell entire stories in one sentence.

        Not exactly like short headline writing but...

        Very interesting if you're looking for ways to tell stories in sales letters in a concise way.

        Granted... much of what's posted there... sucks. And more than a few aren't one sentence stories, rather five or six sentence stories thrown into one long run on sentence.

        But here are a few neat little packages I found...

        "After surfing dozens of porn sites and downloading thousands of songs illegally, I finally got a virus on my laptop from a website containing quotes from the Bible." (Even comes with an unspoken moral to the story.)

        "While my dad told us not to throw any more rocks in the creek, I launched my last big one over my brother's head as he stood up." (Leaves the big third act to your imagination, but still...)

        "The hardest thing was driving to the funeral alone." (Definitely a whole story in that)
        There's some beauties amongst that lot. Really good.
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