Trying Again and Again...

Same criticism as last time - I don't have a clue what you're selling, so why would I buy?

There are several writers on this board who'll give you a quality sales page for just one week of your earnings. You'd do far better to stop messing around and hire someone.

Or - if you really want to do it yourself - you need to start studying the fundamentals of copy.

just curious...how don't you know what I'm selling? it says it right on the page 10 internet marketing courses...

Looking good enough to go out to market.

I would change "course" to "system" as system sounds more repeatable and kinks have been smoothed out.

Also course makes it a claim in which you haven't backed up.

Once it's got a steady stream of traffic to it, keep testing different elements.

All the best,
Ewen

Noboday wants "10 IM courses" for $47.

What does the market REALLY want, Thomas?

Yes, I'm making you work for the answer...

...this time we're gonna make it stick.

Brian

They want to make money quickly and easily... with little or no effort. Or they want the secrets to...

Brian smacked the nail straight on the head...

Sell the "Ultimate End Result" (and what that means to them),
Not the Product it'self (10 courses).

They can get their "Ultimate End Result"... But they just need to know how...
and that's what (product) can help them do... quickly, easily and effectively..

without, big problem one, two or three...

You've also got great proof elements, In the video I'd emphasize
what they're getting when they watch the first video...

then what they're getting if they opt-in... (if you wanted to add one)

then after opt-in, what they're getting with the course.

But the boyz here are right... fire up some traffic... your customers
will tell you if it works or not... and if it doesnt, change it till it does

all the best mate,

Like Brian said: Sell the outcome, not the process. Sell the result, not the method.

Not to be old-fashioned, but "sell the sizzle, not the steak." And incorporate a system of continuous improvement.

A bit of feedback for ya:

I might be alone on this one, but I'm not sure those testimonials are doing you any favors...

In fact, quite possibly the opposite.

Personally, they leave a bad taste in my mouth and make me want to click away.

(read: they "appear" un-legit)

They're waaay too easy to fake. I'd toss 'em or get something better.

The whole thing just has a bad vibe for me.

First, you claim that you obtained these secrets by posing as an "investor".

You're basically claiming that your product's backbone - if not the entire thing - is composed of information you duped from other people.

True or not, ethics aside...

Secondly, for the sake of logic, if I were successfully making millions online... I wouldn't even be interested enough in selling my core business to someone to divulge this information to you in the first place.

If anything, I'd point you in the direction of my products/coaching...


In other words, I would really consider taking a second look at how you're positioning your product. I get the whole "damn the man" approach. But your angle, testimonials, etc. give me more of a vibe that you'd get from a guy trying to sell you a collection of bootlegged movies.

Also, I'd change "stolen" in your headline to something else. The only thing that comes to mind at the moment is something along the lines of "insider". Again, I'm no expert - that's just preference, given the way everything else is presented.

Just so you know, you have a typo on "millionaire".

Keep in mind that your bullet points list a bunch of different topics that you cover. While variety may be a good thing, some people may not be interested in everything you are offering.

In that case, why would I pay $47 to get a undisclosed amount of information on e-mail marketing?

You might consider breaking down your product's information to give yourself the option to better target different prospects.

One thought that comes to mind is perhaps breaking down those ten topics into ten individual reports.

Just a few thoughts...

Good luck,
Mike

Is it only me who is not able to get access to your page or you have pulled down your page...?