Is this good copy for my Donation page?
Hi. I wanted to get a better copy for my donation page. I currently made $21 off of it in a month which is cool, but I want to make loads more.
My current Donate copy on the page says:
I decided to try something different and hope that this brings in loads more donations. Here is what I wrote:
Is it good copy that would make you donate? Anything needs to be changed or anything I need to add to it so that it will get me more donations?
My current Donate copy on the page says:
| You can’t be Earth Emperor without money. I only have a couple hundred bucks and donations can help me get money. You can donate below. |
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Hi. My name is Daniel Kemp and my dream is of becoming the very first Earth Emperor. I like three things a lot; money, power and ladies. This page is about money. To be Earth Emperor money is very important, cause people don't take you seriously if you only have a couple hundred bucks and you live in your parents basement. My goal is to get $1,000,000 in donations by September 9, 2009. The $1,000,000 is just to start me out so that I can take the $1,000,000 and use it to get even more money, and also get power and ladies. Some things I will do with the $1,000,000 are: 1. Move out of my parents basement. 2. Start buying my own food, cause I will be in my own place and I'm not going all the way to my parents house three or more times a day to eat and snack. 3. Learn to dance from a professional, cause I like ladies and ladies like guys who can dance. I tried to dance by myself, but people told me I'm not that good and I need to get dance lessons. 4. Build my brand equity on the Internet by advertising myself on Google AdWords, blogs and other web sites that I think are good. I got this idea from Gary Vaynerchuk. Gary is very cool. 5. Travel to places around the world. You can't be an Earth Emperor if you don't know much about the Earth and the places on it. 6. Go to fancy parties and meet very rich and powerful people. I can become friends with them and they can help me get even richer, more powerful and just those things will probably get me many ladies. 7. Buy a new computer, cause mine is over 4 years old. For every person that donates I will send you your very own original photograph of me with a "Thank you" message. So say a nice lady named Opra sends me a donation for $25. I will take a photograph of myself and write something like "Thank you very much for your donation Opra. Love, Daniel Kemp". Then I will send that photograph to Opra's e-mail. That photograph will be her very own original photograph of me, Daniel Kemp.  You can be Opra and get your very own "Thank you" photograph of me. Just give a donation below: |
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