Review Please

"1 Simple Trick That I Discovered Which (Makes Me) $1000+ On Ebay Without Selling Ebooks"

Replace the words between "Which" and "$1000" with the two words above, and you're grammatically safe.

Not saying it's great copy, but may as well erase the simple mistakes first.

Do you really need all that copy if all you're doing is getting opt ins? Just use a headline, maybe 3 bullets and make sure ur form is above the fold and easily visible.

Also, maybe its just me, but why would you offer people further bonuses just for opting in?

Your report should be good enough to stand on its own. If you want to give the further stuff, just add them to the download page as unadvertised bonuses.

I don't really know now, when I do as stated above they tell me its to short and do it longer to put a story and when I do as short they tell to put a story and do it longer, I don't really know what to choose, can some one give me a good advice that is inbetween, many thanks warriors.

Put the email sign up "above the fold".
Change your headline text to blue, and make it smaller.

Blue headlines get read more than red.

My opinion? This has NO CHANCE of success. Abandon.

I appreciate the "tricks" you're using. But they won't work. They won't be enough to convince.

But of course, I could be wrong. And if motivated, you should throw some money at it in terms of traffic. But I doubt strongly you'll profit.

- Rick Duris

Hi everyone,

Well I appreciate all your feedback but first let me make some few pointers.

First of all this isnt actually my own information product, Its a PLR product in which I already got from some one else, im not the original seller of this information product.

Second of all the sales letter didnt actually come from me, it already came with but I did edit a bit like the title only just so I can make it unique and sales letter style.

third of all usually if the original owner is giving this sales letter and is willing to give it away it must mean that its doing well otherwise why give a sales letter like this in the first place that your all claiming it to be rubbish.

Fourth of all I know that if I can give this information product for free people are going to appreciate the information that they are going to get, it truly is a unique information product on how to make money using ebay in a compleltely different angle and really is a genuine opportunity that anyone can do.

Well I hope this clears it up but I agree with one thing that I should some how make it shorter so that I can grab peoples name and email address.

P.S. I really don't make that kind of money as yet

Get some exit links up there. Especially since it's a pretty long copy for an opt-in.

After every piece of proof you've put up, such as your testimonial list - throw up a simple "I Want The Simple Trick To eBay Riches Now!" that redirects to the bottom of your page where your opt-in is.

Well anyways I dont want to carry on debating and argueing about it, Ill just go with the advice and you ever say to me bash your head and bleed again then why don't you just get a hammer and bash yourself with it on the head before you try to verbally abuse me again.

There's a lot of compelling stuff in your page. That's the good news. I'm trying to see this project from a larger perspective.

First, if you can target eBay people... and if your product is anywhere near what you say it is, you've got a winner. With that said, making good on the claim that people can make $2000 a week and... "I don't sell a single thing," will be reallllly important. In other words, if you have something of value and can convince others it's valuable, you've got something. Right now, your stuff lacks some credibility.

As for squeeze page copy, you have way too much here. You have some of the framework of a nice sales page though. I'm wondering why you've gone to such detail to capture a lead. What's the price of the end product?