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Squeeze check...please

by tntmarketing
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I feel like I have found my place. Just discovered this site 3 weeks ago and have been reading everything since. I am rookie and need some feedback. Brutal honesty works well. There are very talented people in these forums and I hope to learn a lot. Thanks in advance.

My site is: howtobuyaparkinglot......com

after a few days of autos they are directed to:

howtobuyaparkinglot/book.......com

I have sold 3 guides (they were priced at 24.99) and I have been fully up for 2 weeks. I hope to tweak and learn from you all as I go.
#checkplease #copy check #format #sales pages #squeeze #squeeze page
  • Profile picture of the author Drez
    First, who is your target market?

    Are they investors? People looking for a second income? Or folks hoping to build a parking lot empire?

    Do these people REALLY want to know about the parking business?

    Your headline must hook them with what they REALLY want.

    For example something like:

    "Discover the inside secrets to one of the most boring (yet unbelievably profitable) businesses you could ever want to own, run or invest in."

    The Video:

    I think it would be MUCH better to have it narrated. Show real examples (testimonials, if you have them) of how your system has achieved results.

    Bullets:

    The bullets are VERY weak.

    Try to hit benefits and benefits of the benefits. Your first bullet could be rewritten like this:

    "Instantly identify money-making locations for your parking lot (Our 3-step method saves you days of wasted time and costly mistakes)"

    There's really a lot that can be done to improve this page.
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  • Profile picture of the author brianadrian
    I'm wondering how many people looked at your offer to get those three guides sold. Where did they come from? Organic search, paid? How many opt-ins were you dripping your message on to get those three?

    I visited both pages and found myself laughing. Talk about a tight niche. lol. I guess an information product can be made about anything. Thanks for reminding me of that.

    Drez gave some solid advice, I will only add: Your capture page seems long, while your salespage seems short.
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    • Profile picture of the author tntmarketing
      Drez & brianadrian thanks for helping. To answer some questions: I have used adwords, ezine article, a blog, facebook (not sure how that is working), and responding to forums where parking investing is the topic. I have had 53 signups, and I have 5 autos that go out with increasing push (wanna learn how, get the guide...) pitches.

      Please don't hold this against me, but this all started out of recently reading the 4HWW.

      I am committed to make this work and want to learn all I can. I have discovered writing copy is not like the writing I am used to doing. Should I simply pay to have a copy guru revamp my squeeze and sales letter? Or should I stick to the forums and do tweaks on my own?

      Drez, when you say there is a lot that can be done to improve this page, are you trying to to say what I have is pretty bad? I am ready to change whatever it takes.

      Again, thanks for any help any guru can share.
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  • Profile picture of the author tntmarketing
    Drez, signed up for your swipe files too. Thanks
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    • Profile picture of the author Drez
      In addition to the changes already suggested ...

      A Squeeze page is meant to do one thing (and ONLY one thing) - capture an email address. Anything that doesn't help achieve that goal does NOT belong on the page.

      That means your "about us" stuff should go. Because, the way it is, it does NOT help at all.

      And why are the pictures at the bottom of the page. Do THEY help get an opt-in?

      Take it one step at a time.

      Implement some of the suggestions you've received. Then test to see if conversions (opt-ins) improve.
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  • Profile picture of the author PeterBirganza
    Hi,
    The main thing that you have to focus when startup your business is SWOT analysis of your`s and competitors. Than define your target market where you are going to sell your product or services that you are providing. You can also find nice business ideas by visiting "Wholesalepages" and "Alibaba"
    Best of Luck.
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