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Help! Review my landing page please!

by derek_thomas
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Hello fellow warriors.

I have asked this question for a couple different sites, and you all have been so very helpful. I have a few finishing touches to put on it, but I just created a new landing page. As always, I would love your opinions and your critiques.

Here is the link: http://quickandeasydiets.com

Do you think it converts? Of course, I have to test, test, test, but maybe you all could help with my learning curve?

Should the page be more vertically focused less horizontially?

It is very basic copy, but is it any good?

Just any thoughts you have would be so great. Thanks a lot!
#landing #landing page #page #review
  • Profile picture of the author maximus242
    Its better than most.

    You need a USP, what sets you apart from the other 100,000 websites selling weightloss?

    BENEFITS

    Get pictures of hot sexy women being chased after men, make sure they understand...

    Buy Berries == Being Persued By Men

    And MORE PROOF.

    Put the testimonials and make them more visible.

    The video is better than the copy.

    Harlan Kilstien did a copywriting contest a while ago where he criqued weightloss copy, Youtube for Harlan Kilstien
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  • Profile picture of the author winy925
    very nice landing page. but how do you make one like this one
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  • Profile picture of the author AnarchyAds
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  • Profile picture of the author thefallofwork
    I found the copy and layout quite appropriate for the market...

    The only thing I noticed I would personal change is "who Else Is Ready To Loose..." To "Are You Ready To Lose..."

    Maybe consider hidding aff link...

    Great Ad Though!

    Keep Testing and Good Luck!
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  • Profile picture of the author denniston
    A good landing page MUST HAVE an opt-in form on it to collect visitor data. Offer them a free report, free ebook or something else with a perceived value. Ask them for only their first name and email address so they are most likely to opt-in and be sure to put the opt-in form above the fold of your site in the right column of the page... this precise opt-in form location will result in the most opt-ins.

    I can help you add an opt-in form to your web site for free if you'd like, here's the autoresponder service I recommend you use: IncomeBuddy.com - Autoresponders, Ad Tracking, E-Mail Broadcasting, and More! It's the only autoresponder service that guarantees total deliverability and it costs 60% less than the other solutions available.

    Let me know how I can help!
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    • Profile picture of the author angelstrong
      you need to put the opt-in form on the first page. you may be loosing a lot of potential subscribers with this page. I saw the TRY button but it was a bit below the fold...page seemed a little crowded also

      otherwise its good. good job having video on there.

      just my opinion.
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  • Profile picture of the author acktiv8
    Looks good and has the right messages; but I would repeat other warning about copyright images.
    Also, I would add some extra info re 'Increases Metabolism' as this is a big plus in using your bodies own ability to burn fat.
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