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12 years ago

I enjoy scantily-clad, upside-down firewomen as much as the next guy, but I'm not sure they're relevant here.

Make your offer more specific.

What are you actually offering?

Website copy? Sales letters? Postcards? And email campaign?

Then give them an idea of what you can do for them.

Mark Pescetti has posted some good stuff about finding clients through Craigslist.

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Maverick666 12 years ago

Thank you Benjamin! I will refine the ad.
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Mark Pescetti

12 years ago

I've made a lot of money offering my copywriting services on CL over the years.

I'd be shocked if your ad performed well at all.

You're not demonstrating your ability to hone in on an avatar...

...or provide a clear CTA.

You're not pre-qualifying.

Start over.

Make sure you tell people exactly what they need to go (and why.)

By the way...

You posted in the wrong section.

Mark

P.S. How about some basic agitation?

P.P.S. You say "let the professionals handle it" - whatever IT is - but then you say "I." Don't try to look bigger than you are. Make sure people know it's just you.

P.P.P.S. Don't try to be funny. You failed. It wasn't funny. You just lost ALL your credibility.

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Maverick666

12 years ago

My man Mark!

I appreciate your honesty! This is all new to me. I've found that learning is best achieved through DO-ing. Could you point me to some references that outline effective CL copywriting CTA's?

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Mark Pescetti

12 years ago

Originally Posted by Maverick666

My man Mark!

I appreciate your honesty! This is all new to me. I've found that learning is best achieved through DO-ing. Could you point me to some references that outline effective CL copywriting CTA's?

PM me. I'll show you my top performing ad.

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Ltemodel 12 years ago

You might want to be careful with the strip club reference and the girls who "Handle it"
Unless you zero in on a market that accepts that. You might be offending some potential clients.
We as copywriters are a little different breed.
We don't offend easily because to get good, we rise above the white noise world and know there is good and bad; trashy and prim and proper; religious and atheist.
It is just the way the world works.
But many live in a world that says it is wrong; end of story!
And, how dare you suggest she "Handles it" for me!
Ah, too each his own.
Good luck and be careful,
Kevin
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- Maverick666 12 years ago
  
  LTE,
  
  Thanks for your feedback. I've been in the PR industry so I can see where this would backfire. I've put up this ad as a test in many respects. I've gained a lot of valuable feedback and the mere fact it was edgy has given me the opportunity to hear from those who wouldn't ordinarily respond. At the same time, categorically, this ad is a stone throws away from other sections of CL that solicit escorts and prostitutes -- sections that have existed for a very long time despite the morality -- so yes you are very right. Knowing your audience and the environment is extremely important. Do you know of a situation where being edgy has backfired?
  
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  Ltemodel 12 years ago
  
  I know a lot of women who would be offended. And, some of them are business owners. If you are looking to pick up any jobs to build a portfolio, you might want to pull back just a bit.
  Don't get me wrong, I don't mind it.
  It is quite a shocker though.
  To the right market it will probably work.
  
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sethczerepak

12 years ago

When I first clicked on your ad, I thought you were joking.

You're advertising copywriting services but the writing looks like something out of a spam ad for a porn site. The picture doesn't help either. If you're good enough to charge people for your writing, why not take the time to write a good ad?

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12 years ago

hope this helps man.

Here's some rules to follow:

Don't try to be funny
Don't try to be clever
Don't insult your audience

a simple structure to try:

If you're looking for x you've come to the right place.

I understand your pain , blah blah

here is why I'm the person to help you.

here is why you need to act now. here is how you get in touch etc.

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elmo033057

12 years ago

LOL. I'm sorry man, but that was funny.

God Bless,

ELMO

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Maverick666

12 years ago

Fast forward...one week later...not ONE person replied to my copywriting services. Great test. As Mark stated "I'd be shocked if your ad performed well at all." Well, he was right. The ad sucked. Back to square one...At this point all I can see is ZERO, no HERO in sight... Man, I got a lot of learning to do.

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copyassassin

12 years ago

i was disappointed with this ad.

I thought it was for erotic services.

Bummer.

And then to realize it was for copywriting, what a disappointment.

Maybe you can guarantee your clients a "happy ending".

That might help.

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If you wanted to use the hooker theme, maybe you could say,

"Are your sales as limp? Like an 80 year old man? If they are, I've the marketing version of Viagra. In fact, clients of mine have experienced over night spikes in sales. The Secret? It's simple: Sales Labido (TM). A scientifically proven method to increase the strength and power of your sales funnel. In fact, your sales funnel will enlarge 2 to 3.45 times with our proven method. Call me at xxx-xxx-xxxx to experience a sales peak in your business life. (outcalls available)

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DavidLowes

12 years ago

Well played!

Originally Posted by copyassassin

i was disappointed with this ad.

I thought it was for erotic services.

Bummer.

And then to realize it was for copywriting, what a disappointment.

Maybe you can guarantee your clients a "happy ending".

That might help.

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If you wanted to use the hooker theme, maybe you could say,

"Are your sales as limp? Like an 80 year old man? If they are, I've the marketing version of Viagra. In fact, clients of mine have experienced over night spikes in sales. The Secret? It's simple: Sales Labido (TM). A scientifically proven method to increase the strength and power of your sales funnel. In fact, your sales funnel will enlarge 2 to 3.45 times with our proven method. Call me at xxx-xxx-xxxx to experience a sales peak in your business life. (outcalls available)

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