Suggest an Appealing Subject Line

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Hello Everyone,

I have been trying to look for a catchy subject line for my emailer, which will contain information on a website design package with great deals due to festivals approaching. I have got amazing subscribers from UK and would like to send these deals to them.

Please offer your suggestions.
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  • Profile picture of the author ryanbiddulph
    Hi Priyanka,

    Clear and simple always wins.

    Do not try too hard to catch attention spans; force negates.

    Be clear. Stress a benefit of the design deals. Short and punchy.

    Tweak is necessary on follow up emails, but if you keep it simple and clear, you should get some solid clicks.

    Ryan
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    • Profile picture of the author helisell
      Originally Posted by ryanbiddulph View Post

      Hi Priyanka,

      Clear and simple always wins.

      Do not try too hard to catch attention spans; force negates.

      Be clear. Stress a benefit of the design deals. Short and punchy.

      Tweak is necessary on follow up emails, but if you keep it simple and clear, you should get some solid clicks.

      Ryan
      This is great advice.

      I think it was Claude Hopkins 'Scientific Advertising' who talked about selling hay to farmers.

      What would a potential customer need to know about the hay?

      That is the catchiest headline you could create.

      He came up with:

      "Fresh hay, $30 a ton, delivered"

      Perry Marshall talks about 'Racking the Shotgun" you know...that sound..like..'somebody just cocked a gun' you hear THAT and you pay attention.

      So to quote Ryan again
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      Clear and simple always wins.

      Do not try too hard to catch attention spans; force negates.

      Be clear. Stress a benefit of the design deals. Short and punchy.
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      Making Calls To Sell Something? What are you actually saying?
      Is there any room for improvement? Want to find out?

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      • Profile picture of the author PriyankaDST
        Thanks Ryan and Heli, I will surely keep your advice in mind while creating the subject line. I am sure the above advice is required and need to be kept is mind all the time, as sometimes, in an urge of creating the best, we miss out the clear and simple ethics which makes it more fancy leaving behind the real goal.
        Thanks once again.
        Regards
        Priyanka
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  • Profile picture of the author SantaMax
    Hi, the main thing is to quickly catch up. Therefore, it should be short, but also sweethearted.
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  • Profile picture of the author Alangile
    it all depends on your business offer. It's hard to tell if you do not know the details.
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  • Profile picture of the author Mol@Shortlist
    Try and keep in 5 words and under.

    Short, catchy and interesting.

    Try asking a question.

    Hope this helps
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  • Profile picture of the author DABK
    Without knowing the offer? Impossible.

    Just so you don't think I am negative, here are some very appealing subject lines based on nothing but web design package:

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    Originally Posted by PriyankaDST View Post

    Hello Everyone,

    I have been trying to look for a catchy subject line for my emailer, which will contain information on a website design package with great deals due to festivals approaching. I have got amazing subscribers from UK and would like to send these deals to them.

    Please offer your suggestions.
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  • Profile picture of the author Bizopboost
    here is what i think:
    • Start with action-oriented verbs.
    • Make people feel special.
    • Create a sense of urgency.
    • Do tell them what's inside.
    and
    • Keep it short and sweet.
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  • Profile picture of the author slaconsultants
    Email Marketing Template should be clear and Sample with Offer and Link go on exact landing pages .

    Subject line should be clear : CTA, Emotional, and Exact match ..

    Social media links
    Unsubscribe links
    addresses mention footer
    Reply mail
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  • Profile picture of the author PriyankaDST
    Thanks to all for your help. Keeping in mind all the suggestions, I will keep it Clear, Simple and Short . Thanks again..
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